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bluebrdy65
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since 2000-05-16
Posts 276
Gladys,

0 posted 2000-09-28 11:06 PM



Here's my heart
upon this hook
dangling
at the end of my line
I cast it out
for you to love.

Will you nibble?
Will you bite?

As my heart bobbles
in the cool water
I wait with antipation
for
your tug

I wait and long
to catch your
love.


© Copyright 2000 Janie M. Williams - All Rights Reserved
gjam
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since 2000-08-23
Posts 85
Arkansas
1 posted 2000-09-29 12:19 PM


Very creative....nice....i liked this...Greg
melroseg
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since 2000-09-29
Posts 16

2 posted 2000-09-29 12:50 PM


I like it.  I could feel the need and apprehension coming from your words.
catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone
3 posted 2000-09-29 08:11 AM


Hi, well I see there is yet another person here that is living my life..Wow, amazing how the common thread is there for so many. I had never thought of putting it like this, great idea, great poem.
Sandra/cat..

Erin
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since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527
~Chicago~
4 posted 2000-09-29 01:38 PM


I like this one!!It was really creative.

It TaKeS a MiNuTe To LiKe SoMeOnE, aN hOuR tO hAvE a CrUsH oN sOmEoNe & A dAy To FaLl In LoVe, BuT iT tAkEs A lIfEtImE tO fOrGeT sOmEoNe.

Acies
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Twilight Zone
5 posted 2000-09-29 01:49 PM


this is really sweet... keep it up...keep writing

I see no changes, wake up in the morning I ask myself, "Is life worth living or should I blast myself" TUPAC SHAKUR


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