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blondegirl10101 Junior Member
since 2000-09-19
Posts 16 |
i see a girl she looks so sad. her eyes so cold. eyes that tell a tragic tale of heart ache and pain. eyes that have seen way too much for there years. she smiles, but i could see though that phony front. inside she cries. she cries because she longed for a love. she had once given her heart only to have it thrown to the ground, left like a childs broken toy. she looks like she is in more pain than ever before.the rain, her lips tremble her tears fall like from all of the pain she raises her hand almost as if to reach out to me in need of help. SMASH the mirror breaks that girl was me. kristin hahn |
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blondegirl10101 Junior Member
since 2000-09-19
Posts 16 |
i really put alot of feeling into this poem, i know it is not the best but it ame from the heart. kristin hahn |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very nice...you gotta quit breaking those mirrors...very expensive...I remember a time when I didn't want to see myself in the mirror...hoping for smiles to come back into your life...James |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Very nice work, I liked it a lot. That part when the hand reached out for help breaks the mirror was very unique. Thanks for sharing and take care! "Most girls want a man with the mean green Don't wanna dance if he can't be Everything that I dream up A man that understands real love" |
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darkstar Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 230Port Richey, Fl, USA |
Very cool poem...mirrors are cool...I've written a few like that...one got taken off though...oh well...I liked it... Dark Star |
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ilph Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 78 |
I feel for your pain...although the ending can be seen as shedding that pain..or is it just a complete breakdown? well i hope its the former. |
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EagleOne Member Elite
since 2000-03-07
Posts 2829Between a laugh and a tear... |
The feeling shows, I find that writing from the heart is the best way! Take care! "The heart and soul have no illusion of boundries when friendship is the quest" ~ My Angel. |
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