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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California 
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Last Night Last night we should have made love, but last night you seem to not care, you held your space and did not share. Is my physical attire not to your liking, do I not compliment you in a pleasing way? Am I stagnating in your eyes? Why I ask do you not care, I start before the sun and never finish before high midnight with my duties for you and always with you in the for front. What could it possibly be that keeps you from me. My insides are raging at your separateness that you have chosen, my heart does break at the sight of your deadness. How long do you think I must go on in this one-sided love affair? Tonight I think I will not be there, tonight I think I should not care and tomorrow I will not feel the loneliness of this one sided affair. BY, Cerenity Please take note that this was written a long time ago, and I thought of it because this is how im feeling, but I don't think the poem its self is that good, thank you. "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Cerenity... I tend to disagree with you  I thought the poem was good. Obviously written from a lot of feeling... and when that happens sometimes it doesn't seem all that good... because we don't believe it perhaps expresses enough! The subject matter is hard to write about sometimes... you did it well  Take care.~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Tara, Thank you so much for your kind words, your are right the subject matter is so hard to write about because it consumes my every waking minute with pain and confussion. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I know the feeling when you're with someone yet you feel all alone because they are not emotionally available. Take care..James |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
I like this a lot, Cerenity. I think it is very heartfelt, and written very well also. Take care. It's a bad feeling to have, I know. Catalinamoon |
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gjam Member
since 2000-08-23
Posts 85Arkansas |
This poem is very good...the one sided love affair is all too familier..your dedication to your love is genuine..no matter what..never lose that..Greg |
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carolinadreams Member
since 2000-07-20
Posts 142 |
I do not judge, and I do not enjoy many poems. Yours left me with a sincere feeling. Whether it'd been time ago, or feeling again, you have the gift to paint feelings into words. If the past hasn't left y et, please, and I do beg continue to write and share. Peace, Love, and Happiness Forever |
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JP Senior Member
since 1999-05-25
Posts 1343Loomis, CA |
This poem has great merit in its depth of feeling and the ideas conveyed. Seems like something my wife and I have been talking about lately... It has stirred thought and feeling in me, thanks.  Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn. JP "Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway |
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nicolette Junior Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 42St. Paul, Minnesota |
The content of this poem is great....very well written. I enjoyed the honest and sincere feelings behind your words. Thank you. |
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bluebrdy65 Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 276Gladys, |
I think this poem is really good and left me feeling as if you were reading me isnt it strange how we come here and find so many things that we relate too anyways your poem is really good Bluebrdy |
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