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Silent Goodbye |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738
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Your hand you raised In a silent goodbye Your face twisted, Contorted against The glass. As the car moved away I couldn't distinguish What were your tears And what was the rain On the pane Of glass. ~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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JulieAnn Senior Member
since 2000-06-12
Posts 754Earth 3rd Rock from the sun!! |
Wow!!! this is good....great work.....  Julie :) |
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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
Wow!! powerful image....I can see it! Click |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Oh how I hate goodbyes!!!!!!! I just can't handle goodbyes well... It was very nice, I can feel the pain. Take Care! "Most girls want a man with the mean green Don't wanna dance if he can't be Everything that I dream up A man that understands real love" |
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fractal007 Senior Member
since 2000-06-01
Posts 1958 |
This was really good and powerful. The imagery is great. Thanks for sharing. |
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BirdeeB Member
since 2000-09-16
Posts 106USA |
I totally understand, I've said to many goodbyes in my life to cry anymore.. Birdee "So don't judge me by my failures, only by my dreams" SR71 |
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ilph Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 78 |
Tara, so much is cramped into this poem. pane indeed such a wonderful metaphor for love departing. I cant say enough good stuff about this one..it really takes me there even though its a place ive never really been. Josh |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
This may be compact in form for what you have expressed thru pen however it is immense in feelings and tugs real deep. A great write! Coco [This message has been edited by CocoBaci (edited 09-18-2000).] |
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Night Chica Junior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 39Vermont |
Tara - Your poem potrays that image and hurt very well. Goodbyes are always hard and painful. Good Job. Megs I was never one to patiently pick up broken fragments and glue them together again and tell myself that the mended whole was as good as new. What is broken is broken- and I'd rather remember it as it was at its best than mend it and see the broken places as long as I lived. -- Margaret Mitchell |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Julie... thanks for stopping by! Click... thanks for your comments! LM... yeah, I HATE goodbyes also *sigh*... that one was awful.  fractal007... I'm glad you enjoyed it... thanks! Birdee... sorry to hear that... sometimes it does seem as if there are no tears left. Josh... thanks for your comments! You're lucky you've never been there... hope you never do.Coco... thanks for stopping by... glad you liked! Megs... thank you for your thoughts - appreciated BTW, I like your sig. |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Tara, I thought I'd pop by to see what you've been posting recently and it was well worth it! What a perfect and sharp snap-shot you've created here. Ouch! It hurts! Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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Victoria
since 2000-08-12
Posts 5869 |
a sad image you have created..very nice.. "There is a chord in every heart that has a sigh in it, if touched aright." - Marie Louse De La Ramee (1839-1908), English Writer |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Sad and beautiful Tara, Take care Catalinamoon |
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