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Five years of insanity
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Five years of insanity |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Tribute to my 5 years of insanity... Depression reached a whole new level Beeing so far... it breaks my heart Poor soul was taken by the devil Who left me nothing but his card. How does it feel to drive me crazy? How does it feel to hold my heart? How would you know, I never told you What's it like to cry for you tonight. You wouldn't know, I wouldn't say The words I scream and shout inside Five dozen months, two thousand days I wished to have you by my side... How does it feel to kill me gently But be the reason I'm alive? How does it feel to be the only Important person in my life? Forbidden love, forbidden thoughts, Still dancing, racing in my mind Five years I keep unspoken words And pray someday you will be mine. How strange, since you have no idea... I dream you almost every night Close my eyes with thoughts of being Your woman, not a troubled child. |
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!!! Member
since 2000-08-12
Posts 137VA (U.S.A) |
This was a nice piece, which i enjoyed reading. You can almost feel the emotion spurting from it. Nice work. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh my, I am joining you again in this one. The one I am seeing soon, has been in my heart for 9 years. And has NO idea the depth of my feeling. Don't you want to just shout it out some day? This is a great poem, really like the flow, and of course, the content. PS The coors song is great. I think it inspired me... |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Thanks !!!  I'm glad you enjoyed it Catalinamoon: I wanted to scream it so many times, instead i have to hide it and denie it everytime somebody asks me about my feelings! It's such a strange and unpleasant situation... Thank you for understanding yet again... I've made another attempt to send you an e-mail, hope this time it'll be succesful. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
LM~~~This was a great piece of work!!!But why are you hiding your feelings?Just tell this person how you feel. Does this person feel the same about you?? |
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summer Member
since 1999-11-23
Posts 80long beach .ca.usa |
that was good !!! i like the 5 dozen months 2000 days that was such a strong statement..keep up the great work |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Erin: he doesn't and he can't feel the same... you know something? I'll e-mail you and maybe tell you all about it if you're interested in hearing a strange story Thanks for the reply Summer: thanks for your comment It took me sometime, I wanted to emphasize how long it is going on... Glad you liked it! "Most girls want a man with the mean green Don't wanna dance if he can't be Everything that I dream up A man that understands real love" |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"Five dozen months." very nice line. "Close my eyes with thoughts of being your woman. Not a troubled child." Intensity... James |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Thanks a lot James I'm really flattered by your comments "Most girls want a man with the mean green Don't wanna dance if he can't be Everything that I dream up A man that understands real love" |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Sure Im intrested in hearing the story. Thats if you want to tell me it!!! |
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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
WOW!! Very intense!! Sometimes it hurts as bad to let it out as it does to keep it in. Five years can seem an eternity!! Thanx! Click |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Thank you click In my case...almost all of my "adult" life... |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Hell kid it only took me a few monts to go insaine and I never recovered. Great expression here kid. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
LM, I too liked the five dozen months 2000 days. Great write. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Joel: Hehe, thanks for the comment! It also took me few months but lasted much much longer... So far no recovery expected...Kethry: thanks, I'm glad you liked it! "Most girls want a man with the mean green Don't wanna dance if he can't be Everything that I dream up A man that understands real love" |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Hmm... expressed a lot in this... felt the pain... look after yourself. ~ Tara ~ "A poem should not mean, but be" - Archibald MacLeish |
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