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Dark Poetry #2

desperation?

silentsky
Member

since 2000-08-09

Posts 114

0 posted 2000-09-13 07:29 AM

they hit me when im half asleep
and then when im awake

theyre calling me, get on your knees
theyre calling you to hold me please

but where am i

so lost it seems

in dreams of you
and similar themes

dear child of mine
why wont you see

it always comes crawling back to haunt you.

-shira

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

1 posted 2000-09-13 08:38 PM

True Karma! It all comes back the good and the bad, so if you consciously send out more good each day, more good will come your way. And hopefully the bad are few and far between. Nods of understanding though..
Isis

*Friendship is a horizon - which expands whenever we approach it...*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~

Jannel
Member

since 2000-01-18

Posts 492
Muncie, IN, USA

2 posted 2000-09-13 09:07 PM

very good job. and i just love the ending. i thought it was going to be something sweet and mushy, them boom, it wasn't at all. wow.

Don't take any wooden nickels
When you sell your soul
Devil lover, time awaits you
Now the party's over
You're on your own

-the eels

ilph
Member

since 2000-07-28

Posts 78

3 posted 2000-09-13 10:05 PM

Shira,

i think maybe i know the source of this poem.

Anyway i hope it helps you to write it, i know it helps us to read it.

Josh.

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