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A Game Of Pain
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A Game Of Pain |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ 
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~*~A Game Of Pain~*~ If I could turn, your mind into a game. I would do it, without any shame. Because you have played, many games with my head. From the way you treat me, to every word you ever said. It may be little things, that you decide to do. You dont want to feel the pain, but I know you really do. You think of it as nothing, just a bunch of fun. So what are you gonna do, when you are left with no one? One day its gonna happen, and that day will soon be here. Till then I suggest you try to act, as if for once you really do care. [This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 09-07-2000).] |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Yeah!!! Great one ERIN! Let her have it! Do you show her the stuff you write? Maybe that could help... It's amazing how some people just don't realise they hurt others and in the end they're not gonna be the ones who win... Take Care! |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
LM~~~No I have never showed her any of the work that I write about her. Its just a waste of my time to show her. But she knows what she does. Seriously she know how it makes me feel. I know that she has also went through my stuff and most likely found the poems so I dont care to show her. Thanks for the reply!! I really appreciate it.  |
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Virgin Suïcide Member
since 2000-08-11
Posts 319Netherlands |
hey!! great one here!! I really like the ending.... love, Virgin Suïcide! "I love the way you love, but I hate the way, I'm supposed to love you back..." Love is hard to live... Try to live life in love.... |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Virgin~~~You posted you reply exactly when I posted mine. Thanks for the reply. It means alot to me coming from someone who can write so many poems in one day. Im glad you liked the ending!  |
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bluebrdy65 Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 276Gladys, |
Hey great poem I know how this is... I feel this and have lived with this for a long time I hope it gets better for you Bluebrdy |
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Lonelypoet Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 123Conklin,NY,USA |
ERIN, Great poem! I hope you can find some peace someday... There's a difference between knowing a path and walking that path.... |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Thanks for the replies you guys. I know that one day things will get better but till then I just have to wait. ~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~ |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Unfortunatly this sounds like that this could be something written to me from someone...it kinda makes me sad. But, I've read a couple of your poems now and you have a talent to get your feelings across very well....something I have a lot of trouble with!! Good work!!!!  Keep it coming...Bridgette  "Somewhere, somehow, it should be possible to touch someone and never let go again. To hold someone, not for a moment but forever." Unknown |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Go girl!!! Stand up and purge! Years of deciphering people has led me to a conclusion.There are three types of people  People with souls. People without souls who think they have them. And those without souls at all. People number two, those without souls who think they have them, are the hardest to deal with, they 'believe' all the good about themselves, but it is us who 'sees' the truth. These people like the ones without souls at all, usually end up alone, or become damned good at hiding from the truth, hiding from us and themselves.. I'm not saying the man this is written about is soulless, I wouldn't dare presume.. But YOU need to find someone with a soul as beautiful as your own.. *hugs* of understanding. Isis *Friendship is a horizon - which expands whenever we approach it...* ~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Justbleu~~~This was something I wrote for my "sister". I dont think anyone in the world is as cold hearted as her. Isis~~~I wish this was about a guy. But its not. This is about the person all of my poems in here are about. My "sister". I have a boyfriend who is the sweetest. I wouldnt ever want to trade him for anything. Hes the one person that helps me get through what she does to me. Thank yous both so much for the replies. I really appreciate them! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent writing...James |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Thank you much for your reply James!!! ~*YoU cAn CoMpLaIn CuZ rOsEs HaVe ThOrNs Or ReJoIcE cUz ThOrNs HaVe RoSeS*~ |
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eegood Junior Member
since 1999-11-16
Posts 41Chicago,IL |
I think this is a fine message. Direct, upbeat, personal, humorous. If anyone misinterpreted this I don't understand how or why. Good Job |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
eegood~~~There was only one thing that was misinterprated (oops I cant spell today). And that was who this was about. Thanks for the reply!! ~*Each day is a treasure box from God, just waiting to be opened*~ |
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Kirsty New Member
since 2000-08-29
Posts 8Australia |
Wow Erin, this is great. Kinda reminds me of my ex-fiance.. Very moving poem and wonderful. Really nice work Kirsty "Kiss you children goodnight even if they are asleep" |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Thanks for the reply Kirsty. This makes me feel how my sister treats me!< !signature--> ~*Each day is a treasure box from God, just waiting to be opened*~ [This message has been edited by ERIN (edited 09-12-2000).] |
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gjam Member
since 2000-08-23
Posts 85Arkansas |
Erin...i love this poem. I only wish the people we care about could wake and realize what they got before it's too late.... |
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gjam Member
since 2000-08-23
Posts 85Arkansas |
Erin...i love this poem. I only wish the people we care about could wake and realize what they got before it's too late.... |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
gjam~~~I didnt even know you posted a reply to my poem until right now!!Thank you much for your reply. She isnt someone I care about she is just someone who cant stay out of my life and business. |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Erin sorry it is about your sister and not a guy. I'm happy you have a sweetie for a boyfriend!! I suppose the same rules stand sister, boyfriend or whatever. But it hurts a lot more being family doesn't it?? Hope it all works out between you two sisters, she needs to re-evaluate her life and fast by the sounds of things. *hugs* Isis *Friendship is a horizon - which expands whenever we approach it...* ~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~ |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Isis~~~My boyfriend is the one that helps me through all this. And I love him to death just for being there for me. I am sorry that this couldnt be about a guy. But its not. She has been being nice to me for the past couple days, but thats only cause I got my wisdom teeth pulled out. But thanks for the reply!! |
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qtpieelmo Senior Member
since 2000-07-04
Posts 989Sesame Street :) hee hee ,NY |
Wow another great one Erin! Sounds like my ex-best friend excactly. She always made sure that if she was hurt or embarressed to hide it & laugh & put the pain in my body somehow. Not no more. LOL great work LOVE ELMO <3 |
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!!! Member
since 2000-08-12
Posts 137VA (U.S.A) |
Your feelings, and emotion come across crystal clear in this poem, as always. Another great job. |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Thanks a bunch for the replies Elmo and !!!. You guys are the best!! ~*If I was to die & could be 1 thing I would be a tear born in your eyes live on your cheeks and die on your lips*~ |
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StarPryncess17 Senior Member
since 2000-05-31
Posts 932Colorado |
Erin, I have nothing to say but WOW! you are talented girl! I know how you feel...so keep your head up, I'm always here for ya!! < !signature-->Love Always ~*~Jessica~*~Jello!~*~ If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm. [This message has been edited by StarPryncess17 (edited 09-15-2000).] |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Jessica~~~Thanks for your reply!!I really appreciate it that you are here for me!! |
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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
Why must some people play games with others?? They Do end up lonely,they are empty inside already.... Thank you for letting us see!! Good write.... Click |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Erin, sorry you are having such a hard time with your sister, BUT it does make for great writing. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Erin Member Elite
since 2000-06-15
Posts 2527~Chicago~ |
Click & Kethry~~~Thank yous both for your replies. I really appreciate them. Oh and Kethry I agree with you, it makes it perfect for a poem. If only it wasnt real life though!! |
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