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Portia
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since 2000-05-18
Posts 157


0 posted 2000-06-12 12:35 PM


worry
when it's all a spiral
fear
when it's all my mind can see
maybe
I should find
another place to focus my attention
not--
another person, but another place,
another time, another reality
another plane, another frequency
maybe
I need another place to be with you
where I
can be me without the
worry
when it's all a spiral...

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lotharingia
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since 2000-06-04
Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany
1 posted 2000-06-12 05:59 AM


You really bring across a sense of confusion and restlessness here. Before I read this I thought "?", huh? , now I have to say "?" is an excellent title!

 Lotharingia
"For God's sake, he's a poet. Poets are meant to feel miserable. Otherwise, what the hell are they here for? What are they going to write about?"
Tom Holland


amazon_lover
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since 2000-04-09
Posts 491
Dublin,Ireland
2 posted 2000-06-12 03:49 PM


Hi Portia
Another place...another time..I guess when something causes so much strife thats the best solution..

Sincerely
A_L

kaile
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singapore
3 posted 2000-07-14 01:50 AM


eye-catching title and that sums this tone of the poem perfectly!!

wish i have thought of writing a poem with the title"?"

Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
4 posted 2000-07-14 08:16 AM


Oh, that unsettled feeling..another place to focus on, I relate to that very well, yet usually I self-focus and ask what can I do to make ME feel better..Sometimes it works..sometimes not. Very good!! I enoyed this read
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