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silentsky
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since 2000-08-09
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0 posted 2000-09-03 10:16 AM



folded up
in a closet
tear-stained cheeks
delicate eyelashes brushing against my mind
eyes wide with fear

little girl
i whisper
dont despair

please

our lips are trembling
faces falling

please

ill make it all okay
i promise
all okay
promise
i...
me?

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darkstar
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since 2000-08-09
Posts 230
Port Richey, Fl, USA
1 posted 2000-09-03 01:34 PM


Wow...I really liked it.

Dark Star

Sven
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2 posted 2000-09-03 10:17 PM


what's behind the door??

this one made me think. . . very good. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
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ilph
Member
since 2000-07-28
Posts 78

3 posted 2000-09-04 05:21 PM



shira,

this poem really shows your several faces. I recognise that little one.

it's just beautifully sad how you describe things.

Hope you can get out of the closet one day.

josh.

boardman
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since 2000-05-09
Posts 44

4 posted 2000-09-04 08:56 PM


Hi Silentsky,

Very interesting. So many people in such a small place! I liked it a lot.

Vince

"Explosions, are just the thoughts of a creative person." - Boardman

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