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Sven
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0 posted 2000-09-02 10:19 PM


Because our love was true
I thought it would never end
I thought I'd always be with you
And never have a broken heart to mend

Ours was a love pure and right
That burned like a flame
Guiding my days and brightening my nights
My life would never be the same

But now my broken heart won't mend
You took your flame from my view
I thought it would never end
Because our love was true

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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Honeybee
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1 posted 2000-09-02 10:58 PM




This breaks my heart to read this.  Hugs to you, my friend.  Beautifully written, but ever so sad

Take care,
Melissa Honeybee


The beauty of poetry gives my soul wings to fly free within dreams



Isis
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2 posted 2000-09-03 07:22 PM


Sven so sad, it may have been true love for you but it obviously wasn't for her..  But it still hurts all the same.
Another soul song as usual my friend, great work!!  

*Friendship is a horizon - which expands whenever we approach it...*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~



JamesMichael
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3 posted 2000-09-03 08:53 PM


Yes love is ecstasy when it begins and pain and sorrow as it seeks its end...James
LM
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4 posted 2000-09-04 04:38 AM


It's so sad when love ends  for one person but not for the other, and usually the situation is such... ((hugs))
Hope you'll get over it soon and start a new chapter. Take care!

poutprincess
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5 posted 2000-09-04 04:57 AM


*sigh*
no one likes to know that true love can end..but i guess people grow and change and sometimes love cant keep up....i hope you heal soon.
beautiful but sad poem.
~Dawn

"Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos



sonjes
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6 posted 2000-09-04 06:36 AM


So sad when only one side believes that the love is true...your poem (you know) speaks volumes to me and now I feel like crying. For you, for me...the whole world it seems like these days.
  Emotionally intense writing, Sven.

Don't care what people say
Just follow your own way
Don't give up and use the chance
To return to innocence.
-Enigma


Beth
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7 posted 2000-09-04 09:06 AM


~I have re-read this poem twice and I am still speachless...Thanks for sharing!~

~Cherie~

Sven
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8 posted 2000-09-04 12:06 PM


Melissa, thank you. . . I didn't mean to!  

Isis, it's always that way isn't it??  Thank you my friend. . .

James, why is it like that?  The ultimate poetic question. . . thank you. . .

LM, thank you for your thoughts. . .

Dawn, it is sad when you think that you have it all. . . and then you don't. . . thank you for reading. . .

sonjes, I know. . . but it's not always going to be that way. . . there is a sunrise. . . keep believing that. . .  

Beth, thank you so much!!  Glad that you enjoyed. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


boji stone
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9 posted 2000-09-04 12:50 PM


"only love can break
a heart, only love
can mend it again"


i hope this was just writing,
but if not, either way
it was heartfelt....
nicely done~~

*S*
bj

~the breath, a mystery
of it's own ~~


StarPryncess17
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10 posted 2000-09-04 03:38 PM


So sad how often we find ourselves piecing our shattered hearts back together. I'm so sorry that you're feeling this way. I hope you can pick your heart up off the floor and move on! Nicely written poem!!
~*~Jessica~*~


~*~If aLl My FrIeNdS JuMpEd OfF a BrIdGe, I WoUlDn'T JuMp WiTH ThEm BeCaUsE I'd Be At ThE bOtToM tO CaTcH ThEm.:)~*~

Sven
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11 posted 2000-09-04 10:08 PM


boji, thanks for the song, and for the thoughts. . .  

Star, thank you my friend. . .

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


Lone Wolf
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12 posted 2000-09-05 12:55 PM


Sven,

If it was meant to be, it will be.  If not, then you are probably better off.  Nice poem.  Well written.

LW


Poetry should surprise by fine excess...it should strike the reader as a wording of his own highest thoughts and appear almost a remembrance. -J.Keats

Scarlet Lady
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13 posted 2000-09-05 01:55 AM


Sven......I know exactly how this feels, but how you expressed it so vividly,  that's what made it  so  real in it's picture of pain of the human heart.    I am the better for you sharing your  gift,  and feel for you in your pain.  I think you might live near me???  Seen your profile one time.....Illinois???  Great work, I enjoyed it!  Lynne
Marina
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Pickering, Ontario
14 posted 2000-09-05 11:56 AM


Your heart my friend, I think has been cracked but not broken.  To be in love.....a true love, would mean one must feel the same......

A great expression of emotion here Sven.

Marina


It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen
Marina Crossley



Sven
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15 posted 2000-09-05 07:36 PM


LW, perhaps I am. . . thank you my friend. . .  

Illusion, thank you for reading, I'm sorry that you know how this feels. . . I wouldn't wish it on anyone. . . and you might want to take another look at my profile. . .  

Marina, thank you my friend. . .  

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That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl


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