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Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

0 posted 2000-08-31 11:19 AM

Bury Me In Sorrow

Murmurings echo this empty shell
with others who precede me
to hell's way at a brisk pace.
Bereft and adrift I reap
and sow course sand leaking
through time.

Discourse; I watch
in remorse.

So like dreams, unrelenting taunts
taking their toll. I release,
spewing forth hungry fantasy.
Clenched lips nourish with moisture low.
Gritty particles disappear in undulating waves
of transgression.

I bask in hollow-stomach lies,
life flashes before my eyes.

Tulip fields,
lush with fallacy-fed humid puffs, thrive.
Petals open, doubling to the shuddering,
windy nips and I watch appalled,
cold breeze releasing their hips,
blooming unfertile.

Suffer me, take me down
as black nears over the rise,
chasing away white.
Drown me in the mocking
dew,

Bury me in sorrow.

...chanson~

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"Music, when soft voices die,
Vibrates in the memory..."
P.B. Shelley

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

1 posted 2000-08-31 07:26 PM

Brilliant work here hon!
The third verse is the kicker for me!!!
Great stuff!

*Our deeds travel with us from afar, and what we have been makes us what we are..*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

2 posted 2000-08-31 08:37 PM

Thanks, Isis. Contrary of the dreary content, I actually had alot of fun writing this one. *grin*

I'm thrilled you like it. And I mean that...because I hesitated posting this.

Thanks again.

....chanson~

Deranger
Member

since 2000-05-10

Posts 498
Somewhere, between here and there

3 posted 2000-08-31 10:19 PM

Bury me in sorrow too!

“So like dreams, unrelenting taunts
taking their toll. I release,
spewing forth hungry fantasy.
Clenched lips nourish with moisture low.
Gritty particles disappear in undulating waves
of transgression.”

I like this verse/line/rhyme/whatever (Slash slash!) the best too! Yummy work!
Yum yum yum!

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“Writing about darkness comes easily for me. I just close my eyes and write what I

Chanson
Senior Member

since 2000-08-19

Posts 1559
Up Creek w/Out Paddle

4 posted 2000-09-01 12:25 PM

I'm pleased to have piqued your tastebuds, Deranger.

...(Super grin? It looks more like a Halloween mask. *giggle*)

"Music, when soft voices die,
Vibrates in the memory..."
P.B. Shelley

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