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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
I shot an arrow In the sky Don't ask me where Don't ask me why And with it went My heart that died And all the tears That I had cried I stood alone Without a sound With my feet Firm on the ground I felt something And turned around But no one there Is what I found I walked away With head held low Know not do I Where next I'll go As I trudge alone My pace is slow After paying the price I've nothing to show These words now I'll not repeat For they echo My defeat My love is lost And bitter sweet My soul is ash Before my feet G. A. Webb < !signature--> Regret not that which you have done, Rather that which you haven't [This message has been edited by G. A. Webb (edited 08-29-2000).] |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
This is awesome. Every line is just spell binding. I loved the following very much. And with it went My heart that died And all the tears That I had cried Great work.  Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh this is so rich and powerful. And so sad. I can't tell you how much I liked this poem. catalinamoon |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Oh, oh.... Awesome poem!!! Simply great... "My love is lost And bitter sweet My soul is ash Before my feet " Great writing!!! Take care! |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
Great rhythm and flow in this poem...twas an enjoyable read with great emotion wove into the fabric of the words... Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
wonderful poem, so easy to read such powerful words. |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
Thank you all for your comments! I'm glad you all liked this one so much. I started with the first stanza (which is unusual for me sense I usually start my writings either from the end or in the middle and build from there) and was going to leave it at that. But that little voice inside my head that tells me what and when to write urged me to go further with this and gave me the rest. So this is what came out. I almost cried when I read my finished work. Thank you all again!  G Regret not that which you have done, Rather that which you haven't |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
So glad you listened to that little voice and wrote this full piece!! It's great Pity more don't listen to that little voice more often, like I keep telling them too LOL Great work hon, I can see how it would move you.. Isis *Our deeds travel with us from afar, and what we have been makes us what we are..* ~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~ |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
Isis: Thanks Lisa! I always like when you read my work. Take care! G Regret not that which you have done, Rather that which you haven't |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
I felt this and a tear or two myself... ~~soft hugs Maureen |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~G,...Your words put me there, in the distance, sort of just watching this take place. Powerfully written with such a sorrow tone to it. Heavy stuff. Truly reaches my heart, these words. Do take care. *Peace. |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
MMoonchild: Thank you. I'm sorry I brought a tear to your eye but glad that my thoughts touched you. Here's a hug for you! Take care! SpitFire: Thanks for reading this. I thought you might like it. Take care as well my dear. Peace! G Regret not that which you have done, Rather that which you haven't |
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