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Observed From A Distance
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Observed From A Distance |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396
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Observed From A Distance I didn't see you there, on corners of my cracking, concrete walking ways in seconds of my stroll. Brick by brick a trace remains and I never recognized your presense then. I never opened wide enough to taste you there, to feel your breath skip by and gently fall within my gills. It was late then and stars were sad and puddles gathered hate. I'm feeling cold now, as I remember it alone, and scared and wandering. Searching for the time, the time of then and now. It's crumbled and sacred nomore and it's buckled for the last time. I didn't see you there in doors of passing, in glances dismissed. The night wasn't as tough and the day just took the cake when it came to that. I hid behind the hate and swam in the puddle's cradle. I drank from fountains green with algae, growth of time and disease. I ate from fruitless trees and dirty earth. I never saw you there, and you observed from a distance, the way I softly sang myself down blocks downtown, to nowhere but here. |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
"I hid behind the hate and swam in the puddles cradle I drank from fountains green with algae, growth of time and disease I ate from the fruitless trees and dirty earth." WOW very powerful images. this one i will have to read and re-read... ~Dawn< !signature--> "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos [This message has been edited by poutprincess (edited 08-29-2000).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Spitfire stunning images, great poem very intense, excellently written my friend.  "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh my, this is another beauty . You have such a way with visualization. I always see the most amazing things as I read your poems. Sandra |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
What an angle you have here Fire. Melancholic and Really Beautiful! I've been missing your stuff (can't get it together to drop by regularly at the mo  )Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Your words speak truth of ages which boils itself to a concept of reality. Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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G. A. Webb Member
since 2000-01-21
Posts 441Stanton, California, USA |
Beautiful, simply beautiful. Well done Spit, bravo!  G< !signature--> Regret not that which you have done, Rather that which you haven't [This message has been edited by G. A. Webb (edited 08-31-2000).] |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Bravo Spit! You NEVER disappoint do you? LOL *Our deeds travel with us from afar, and what we have been makes us what we are..* ~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~ |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
You are amazing SpitFire! This one touched me. And I must stand up and give my applause with whistles too! ______________________________ She has Fire in her eyes The brightest stars that burn so wise May her dreams all be of love In her eyes that shine above She looks from a heaven's view From a distance observed directly at you Looking up I feel desire When I stare in the eyes of SpitFire _______________________________  |
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kat Member
since 2000-05-20
Posts 387 |
This is incredible writing SpitFire!!! Wow!! The images, the intensity, everything! Your talent really shines through. I enjoyed this one alot!! kat |
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