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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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everything - you planned. succinctly, you designed. then slithered in still tall, still grand (in dark caverns, -your delusions shifting sand) so “fine,” you whined, deceitfully reclined athwart your spider-line black-widow-***** you bragged your heart spent out without a care on all those nights, (-those lonely nights) While I’d cry in unaware you’d dare-me-dare then boast your cheap affair you chased me wicked grinning ‘round me soul-strain spinning beneath me over-ending left me just beginning you and now I’ve got an open twisted torn and broken rebuilt yet still unspoken memory of hopin’ it was all a dream just nightmared knife unending strife faithless wife stained eyes rife with unearned life you waste on him Want to stay Not to go Wanna ditch the logical. -Eve 6 [This message has been edited by Christopher (edited 08-28-2000).] |
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JSage Member
since 2000-08-25
Posts 91Nashua, NH USA |
You write very well... that poem expressed so much that I could feel and even relate to and in such a beautiful way with such wonderful metaphors. I look forward to reading more from you. -Jes |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
Just an awesome, and a deep poem. Thank you for sharing.  Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Christopher, wow, wow wow damn you are good, I came home tired and weary only to be slapped across the face with this, and man does it sting, also hurt my ego...I am jealous, this is just too good. "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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Lil OnE Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 234Pasco County. Fl. |
Christopher, WOW. Like brian madden said... "Damn you are good". I really liked this. Such feeling behind it! The line, "You left me, just beginning you" was really thought proviking for me. Once so close, nobody could tell where you ended and she started. I miss that feeling so much. Very well written!  "I've fallen asleep, slept so sound. Fallen so fast, I missed the ground" ~Lil OnE~ |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Hey C,...haven't read you in a few. Glad to get the chance again. This one definately leaves a mark. A trace of it remains wrapped around me. Swirling with your words,...so cleverly expressing this. So many totally flowing lines. This is intelligent writing. It's so well said. So real. So,...damn good. Take care kid. *Peace. ~Holy moly was that a praising reply or what??? heheahahaha..I meant every bit...honestly I did. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I read it over and over-- it has a wonderful lilting melody if you sing it...lol very good poem here Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
very good poem, I love the flow of the words the way they reached out to me was incredible. |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
You know, if you keep writing your heart like this, it just may ruin your reputation...smiles to you Chris...this is excellent work as usual. |
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silentsky Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 114 |
the flow of words is really well done... i like your poem a whole lot. it expresses a lot of pain. shira |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Chris, WoW! Wow! WOW! this piece left me breathless and bleeding (metaphorically speaking) Fabulous , fabulous work. Look you've got me so amazed I'm repeating myself. Once again fabuluos. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
JSage - A warm thank you. I'm afraid that if you're truly interested, you might have to search the archives and such. I'm afraid I don't get much chance to write poetry these days!  Xeonox - Thank you for replying! Brian - Wow m'friend... you're certainly helping my ego!  Thank you sir!Lil OnE - Thank you... I miss it too. SpitFire - You ok chick??? 'Precite the warm gushing, I do, I do!  Jamie - I would... but nothing sounds good if *I* sing it! Thank you! Rosebud1229 - I'm grateful it touched you. S'en - Reread it lady... look a little deeper...*wink-wink nudge-nudge* silentsky - Thank you... and yes. But I do believe that through expression can come negation. Kethry - LOL Glad it's metaphoric... would hate to hear of someone having to go to the hospital because of me!  Thank you!Peace all Chris |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Hmmm...wow Different, unique, cool...very cool. There's a flow about this that the tongue could almost dance to. Chris, this reminds me very strongly of something. I'll email you! |
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Chanson Senior Member
since 2000-08-19
Posts 1559Up Creek w/Out Paddle |
Christopher, you write very well. You have a way of clinching the deep feelings, describing them wonderfully. Much enjoyed the read. ...chanson~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Oh. Nevermind. ROFL....I think I need to get out of the house for awhile...LOL |
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insect Senior Member
since 2000-04-22
Posts 1014 |
This is excellent Christopher! It seems more like a message? I'm locking this one and putting it into Announcements & Links or maybe Feelings. (click!)..Umm! (Click!)…Hmmmm! (CLICK!)…..HEY! What the!!!? (CLICK!)(CLICK!)(CLICK!) …. (click!)…. awe! LOL Great poem! Well I can put it up on top!! |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Wow, Christopher... can't believe I almost missed it. Great piece! Well I guess it's only natural that moderators write so well, you are a great inspiration to us all! Take care, LM. |
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Christopher
Moderator
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Nic - Always a pleasure to have you drop in on me lady!  Chanson - I write what I know!  Thank you!Se'n - go hiking or whatever... just do something about those thighs!!! (hehe)LM - Thank you very kindly! Although I don't think talent has anything to do with being a moderator (or I'd NEVER haver been chosen! )AND Insect - ... ... ...ROFLMAO!!! Thank you!!! That is one of the best laughs I've had in a LOOOOONG time! I liteerally sat here laughing as soon as I read that! Thank you for that.. oh, and the comment. Chris |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
HEY---that was a low blow---hmmm...did I really just type that? LOL---you'd better watch it bud--I know wrestlin' moves... |
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