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Dark Poetry #2

Sailor's Fate

Click
Member

since 2000-06-11

Posts 202
USA

0 posted 2000-08-27 06:38 PM

Patched together,
and sailing on.
Drawn by,
the Siren's song.

Sounds of breakers,
in my ear.
Seek the song,
that I must hear.

Lost at sea,
in the dark of night.
Tears and hope,
rob all sight.

Rowing hard,
against the swells.
Feel the tides,
that I know well.

Seeking refuge,
on that beach.
That I know,
I'll never reach.

Brackish taste,
upon her lips.
I'm drownded by,
the Siren's kiss.

Brine spray drippng,
from her skin.
She returns to sea,
to sing again.

Click

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

1 posted 2000-08-27 09:14 PM

She returns to sea to break another heart. Well done hon, I enjoyed this one.
You may want to change the spelling of drownded to drowned, a typo I know, but then it'll be perfect!!

*Our deeds travel with us from afar, and what we have been makes us what we are..*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~

Xeonox

Senior Member

since 2000-04-01

Posts 1764
CA, USA

2 posted 2000-08-27 10:37 PM

Simply awesome. I enjoyed every line of it.

Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create).

!!!
Member

since 2000-08-12

Posts 137
VA (U.S.A)

3 posted 2000-08-28 12:38 PM

Very nice poem. Reminds me of when i had to read "The Odyssey" in class. Keep up the good work!

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