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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia 
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Screaming and beating you to the punch- line. Who are you? joker jester souless molester. Keep your hands off of my disease. Stop feeding me glass in guise of chemical balance. What are you killing, the me in you or the you in me? Laughing Laughing Sickening Saddening Stupid Little Man. Percieve Believe I hate you And you hate me because I share my infection. You are sterile pathetic and still breathing. Leave me alone. Stop poisoning me. Or start sleeping with both eyes open. whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Ok I am getting a lock put on my door from now on, sorry bad joke, I can hear this one being screamed out and I am very afraid. A powerful read, each line sent a shiver down my spine. "I concede relationships have left me weak Won't be here so I don't care Look for something worthy to replace my guilt" Mansun legacy |
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sonjes Senior Member
since 2000-02-18
Posts 564North Carolina |
wow...what a wicked ink you have in your quill...I must say that you drew me in and caused my eyed to grow wide with anticipation for each new word. Don't care what people say Just follow your own way Don't give up and use the chance To return to innocence. -Enigma |
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MiseryDivine Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 114Chicago! en america...oh lala! i wish i lived in England.....(sigh) |
oh my gawd...evil...yet a good evil...this was so good...i feel like i was there...great peom All i want in life is to be happy It seems to me How messed up things can be Everytime i get ahead I fell more dead ~KoRn~~ |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
Brian: its ok, you dont have to lock your door....i could never get THAT angry with you! sonjes:thank you! i like that you think i have "wicked ink in my quill"! MiseryDivine: LOL evil? me evil? thank you so much for that compliment! i sometimes like being evil, makes you feel a bit powerful sometimes!  whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
Interesting read, could almost hear the screaming. As for Evil being more powerful than Good. T'is only a misconception, it's just that Evil has fewer constraints on the wielding. Gloom |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
Gloom: i always learn something when you reply...and im grateful for it..thank you for responding with wisdom. ~Dawn |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Well, Dawn, I felt this one through and through. Not so much evil to me, as defensive. And striking out at the pain. Great writing. Take care. catalinamoon |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
thank you! i feel like ive done too much "striking out in defense to the pain"..want it to stop..just need a rest now and then. ~Dawn "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Powerful, strong, and very affective writing here Dawn! Whoa!!! Take care of you. *Peace. |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
well expressed powerful piece If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
spitfire: thanks for that "whoa"! AVANTI: thank you for the reply, its much appreciated! ~Dawn "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
WoOoOoOh. I'm sleeping with my eyes open, scary write even if it's not aimed at me. Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
Kethry: hahahah...dont worry, you can rest easy! thank you for replying with that very audible "woOoOoOh"! ~Dawn "Steady as it comes, right down to you, I've said it all, so maybe we're a Bliss of another kind" Bliss-Tori Amos |
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