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A holiday in Hell |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland 
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"Imagine humour, imagine a tourist with a smile as he passes the sights detached, whta is hell? but a word a state of mind, if you invert hell will you get to heaven?" coming soon the holiday snaps and the tacky souvenirs, including a t-shirt with the words "my friend went to the pit of despair and brought me back this lousy t-shirt" ----------------------------- I am taking a holiday in Hell, a permanent vacation to see uncle nick, old man Satan. I am going across the valley of agony, down that beaten path of eternal misery, going to kick the stones of good intention, spit on the cross and laugh at my redemption. I am taking a holiday in a well, bottomless and filled with searing water where righteous preachers drowns the sinful daughter. I am sailing down a river of black despair, taking in the sights travelling without a care, I am going to picnic beneath the hanging noose, eat filthy pig, ground bones in blood and baptised goose. I am taking a holiday this soul to sell, I just want to walk the darkest corner, search the shadow voids as a foreigner, bowing in reflection below the crucifix, speak words of condolence and respect. I am walking where angels fear to thread, where only I can travel with a final blow to my head. I am taking a holiday with the final toll of church bell, enjoy the scenery, the vice pleasure and pain, dancing naked in the fires, fading in the black rain. Staring from the filth, pits and sty into the vacant eyes where histories' rewritten, man's created and everything is lies. My mind sees in stanch clarity in the valley where angels fell. that I never left earth, life has always been a holiday in Hell. "Beyond all this good is the terror,The grip of a mercenary hand,When savagery turns all good reason, There's no turning back, no last stand,"I.Curtis |
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Click Member
since 2000-06-11
Posts 202USA |
"...kick the stones of good intention." I like that!! Good read! Thanks! Click |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
after reading "my friend went to the pit of despair and brought me back this lousy t-shirt" i ended up reading entire poem with a smile on my face..yes its full of dark morbid images, but somehow i found it funny...i should come back and read again later when im a little less silly. though as always, a very good read. ~Dawn whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Hey Brian, This is fantastic, tongue in cheek, and TRUE. Compliments, compliments, compliments.  Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
dont' know why, but this one reminds me of a rather heavy metal song... COWBOYS FROM HELL by Pantera... WOW a wonderful work from you brian... regards, sudhir |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
You are the dark master, and it's hell trying to match your satanic verse, so I won't try. I'll just be off in the corner having a cry.  Be well In hell Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Thanks Click. Dawn, it was suppose to be funny but I got all moody and sombre at the end. Actually I thinking along the lines of Nick Cave's stuff, with a bit more humour. Thanks for your wonderful reply. By the way I got the t-shirt for you as well as a damned soul keyring containing one real damned soul, I was told it was Liam Gallagher from Oasis, yes he is actually dead but the drugs in the system give the impression that he is still alive. THanks again. lotharingia, Damien was asking for you. Thanks for your compliments. Sudhir, Satan actually hates death metal, too loud he told me, he prefers Barry Manilow and Britney Spears, real evil music. He told me if you play Britney Spear's album backwards you can open the gates of hell. Thanks for your wonderful words. Kethry, dark master? Na, just a tourist. It was either Hell or Siberia for my holidays, it was all I could afford on my budget. THanks for your kind words. Come out of the corner no need to cry, I brought you back a something, it may look like a little puppy but just add holy water and it turns into a hound from hell, use it to kill postmen, butcher your neighbours, shred cars, feed it on a diet of politicians, lawyers and talk show hosts. Don't feed it Jerry Springer because not even a hound from hell could eat Jerry. "Beyond all this good is the terror,The grip of a mercenary hand,When savagery turns all good reason, There's no turning back, no last stand,"I.Curtis |
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ggrn3 Member
since 2000-08-17
Posts 433Nahunta Georgia U.S. |
Brian This is very well written. Dark images were very vivid as I read this one. It's true, your last line. Some people actually do experience hell on earth. Garfield |
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Rosebud1229 Senior Member
since 2000-04-05
Posts 1813North Carolina |
Did you enjoy the scenery ? did you like the tour? going down the river in black dispair glad you had a ticket back for I wouldn't want you to spend eternity in jet black! This was a very cool poem, every line seems to define a scene, of which I would rather here of than be a part of. Down in a well of searing water. wow all great words. |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
hehehehehehehe I sure could use that hound about now. Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Briaan, fantastic writing as always. Very interesting, and dark, yet with the touch of humor. Love it! Catalinamoon |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Just love this line "my friend went to the pit of despair and brought me back this lousy t-shirt"...oh, and the rest of the piece also...hee, hee. Very well done, my friend. jwesley [This message has been edited by jwesley (edited 08-24-2000).] |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Brian, Well I am not sure how to describ the feelings I am experiencing, can I throw you a rose for the awesome beauty or a peice of catus so to make your stay alittle more painful, you are for sure a poet and I loved this one, man I loved it. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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JSage Member
since 2000-08-25
Posts 91Nashua, NH USA |
I am thoroughly impressed! You just totally kicked my uh.. bum. -Jes |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
intresting writing...very well written If I should fall again, then they will laugh but what if just this one I rise? Avanti Rao |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~B,B,B,...what do I say? You have got such a tangled and totally interesting way about you and your words. This here poem is one fine piece of writing. I expected nothing less,...but again am more than satisfied in my hunger. Gripping. I like where you took it. Such great writing. Take care please. *Peace. |
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