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!!!
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since 2000-08-12
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0 posted 2000-08-20 01:57 AM


(free verse)

In an eternal state of damnation, and misery
You will visualize, feel, and suffer just as i have for eons.
Lifetimes spent, in pain, and torture
Repenting the decisions i made, the beliefs i embraced.

In this reality of agony is where YOU will rot,
Constant punishment, and vindication, and persecution
To be carried out unto your weakened, lifeless body,
Your soul to be rended, and shaped by the cleansing, righteous fire that is MY will,
As you, and others of your kind,
Dance before me, enfeebled, and stupid in your way,
To be a puppet in my sick show, your only pupose,
to carry out my sick, malevolent whims.

You have sinned, and you will pay.
You will pay in blood of your tortured body,
and the screams of your soul,
as it dies a thousand deaths, again, and again,
all in a single, terrifying insatnt.

I want you to remember,
That this is not just a place,
But also a state of mind.
Whether it be searing, painful torture,
Or mental anguish beyond anything you could ever imagine...
The greatest Hell is within your own self...
I merely enhance that infinity times over.

Your punishment awaits.....


(As you may be able to tell, this was off the top of my head. When youre in that mood, well....)
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-"Death is the servant of the righteous."



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Janie
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since 2000-08-13
Posts 158

1 posted 2000-08-20 02:06 AM


This is good for off the top of your head. You may want to use spell-ck though for a few words. As far as the message though, very good and seems to be a lot of truth. Many times we do put ourselves in our own "Hell". Some people even say life is hard enough without there being a "Hell" too. I think it better to use all power necessary to prevent being wrong in that assumption.

Janie< !signature-->



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demoninlove
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since 2000-02-11
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Dehradun
2 posted 2000-08-20 02:42 AM


But who are you in this great panaromic view of Erebus?
Deepak


!!!
Member
since 2000-08-12
Posts 137
VA (U.S.A)
3 posted 2000-08-20 05:56 PM


I wanted to post this view as me being Hades, or Satan, call it what you wish. I was just tryin somethin.

-"Death is the servant of the righteous."


Isis
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since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland
4 posted 2000-08-20 07:59 PM


Well I think it's a damned powerful trial hon, that you succeeded with honours.  You should experiment more often!!  

*Our deeds travel with us from afar, and what we have been makes us what we are..*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~


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