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Lil OnE
Member

since 1999-12-14

Posts 234
Pasco County. Fl.

0 posted 2000-08-18 02:33 PM

My boat is small,
tossed by waves and emotions.

CONFUSION AND CHAOS

Traveling this river,
the water rushes
faster than I can think.

CONFUSION FILLS MY SAILS

My mind is weak
torn between things mortal
and eternal.

CHAOS FUELS MY SHIP

And as I am faltering,
wavering,
the swirling waves of
chaos and confusion
threaten to cover me
and end the torment.

But will it really??

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Never give your heart away, it will always come back broken.
~Lil OnE~

[This message has been edited by Lil OnE (edited 08-20-2000).]

Cerenity
Member Elite

since 2000-02-16

Posts 2637
Escondido-California

1 posted 2000-08-18 05:22 PM

Hi Lil OnE,

Wonderful, wow I like this poem, confusion a thing I posses but when I want to be coved over it never happens I just seem to hang there, awewsome read thanks.

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

2 posted 2000-08-18 06:12 PM

~Intense writing! What a ride you took me on. I am swimming in your words and flowing with the current. Great work here. *Peace.

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

3 posted 2000-08-18 07:30 PM

I am drowning in your confusion (HUGS)
Be well
Kethry

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures;
but it is the loss that shapes the image,
gathers the flowers weaves the garland."-

Lil OnE
Member

since 1999-12-14

Posts 234
Pasco County. Fl.

4 posted 2000-08-19 10:41 AM

Thanks to all three of you. And Kethry, Thanks for all of your kind replies to all of my poetry. It means a lot

Never give your heart away, it will always come back broken.
~Lil OnE~

demoninlove
Member

since 2000-02-11

Posts 211
Dehradun

5 posted 2000-08-20 02:02 AM

Winds of confusion, and Chaos the fuel - very nice anology. If I were you - I would reflect on this further and develop it to cover broader canvasses of the scheme of things - something you are quite capable of from what little I have seen of your command over words and the poetic inclination of your soul
Well Done Little One
Deepak

Lil OnE
Member

since 1999-12-14

Posts 234
Pasco County. Fl.

6 posted 2000-08-20 03:56 PM

demoninlove...
thank you for the last few sentences of your reply to this post. That was probably the best compliment I've gotten about any of my work. If you feel there's something to add to this... feel free

That's all I could find to describe how I felt, but if it brings out some feelings of your own, please do add on.

Thanks again!!! ((HUGS))

Never give your heart away, it will always come back broken.
~Lil OnE~

Isis
Member Ascendant

since 1999-09-06

Posts 6296
Sunny Queensland

7 posted 2000-08-20 08:27 PM

Hopefully the winds of confusion will be replaced with the winds of change and renewal.
A wonderful journey into your inner world here hon.. Great work!! Wonderful imagery

*Our deeds travel with us from afar, and what we have been makes us what we are..*
~Isis~Goddess~~Sovereign of the Spirit~

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