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Your Disgrace |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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I did it. I just let him in. Nothing coy, I played no games. I told him all, I thought he'd run, but he stayed awhile, to play. For once, I thought it might could be-- about who I am, not what he sees... there is much more inside of me, than lashes long, and blushing cheeks... and it is nice to be admired, a power felt to spark desire-- soon enough, I grew tired, of what to say when lust expires... Am I pretty? What is that-- when beauty fades and thighs grow fat? Through my tears, I write in pain, to think I loved a man so vain... I'm looking forward to the day, to see your face, and your dismay... for this is yours, it's your disgrace, my ass is fine-- as I walk away... And you will know, when you grow old-- I hid my face so you'd see my soul... I know that you'll remember me, when wisdom makes you more aware-- remember, as you count your hairs-- a beauty stood before you, bare. |
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darkstar Member
since 2000-08-09
Posts 230Port Richey, Fl, USA |
Wow...that's really great. We all want somebody to look past our appearence and see us for who we really are. Dark Star |
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Lil OnE Member
since 1999-12-14
Posts 234Pasco County. Fl. |
I asked nothing more of my ex fiancee, but never got it. Such a physical world we live in, where people refuse to look past the flesh, to see the beauty that lies beneath. I love the way you have captured this. Great work! Never give your heart away, it will always come back broken. ~Lil OnE~ |
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firejerm Member
since 2000-06-13
Posts 217Springfield, OH, good ol USA |
Well, the painful truth is, we see the outer beauty first before we give ourselves the chance to know the inner beauty  It seems to me, this author possesses both, and this work really intriguied me! If romance is physically fit, then lust is part of a good loving relationship. I loved this....I've read it twice."Those little slices of death, how I loathe them." -Edgar Allen Poe |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I thank you all so much for your understanding...and firejerm, couldn't help but notice...you joined the forum on my birthday!!!! What a nice, belated present for me.... |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Serenity, Wow you hit alot of things on the head here, I have so many things I could say but im not except to say you are trully awesome, wonderful, a poet, wow you have me spell bound by this. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
You go girl!!!!!!! I've been there I do know, and I must add it does give you great satisfaction when you find out they've finally realised just what they let go!!! I looked at is as a glory day, a little personal victory for me. And it will happen for you too, and I hope you do the same. Great work here hon *Our deeds travel with us from afar, and what we have been makes us what we are..* Isis ~ Sovereign of the Spirit |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~BRAVO~ Serenity,...this poem totally KIX!!! MMhhm,...Right On! Strong. Take care you. *Peace. |
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sash Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 125 |
Serenity~~Outstanding!!! Loved this poem!! Women of earth: TAKE NOTCE!!! |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Serenity, Thanks for posting such a strong poem. i liked it. I agree about being too in volved with the physical to see the inner beauty. Fortunately I've got to an age where my appearance doesn't matter...MUCH! Be well Kethry "It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Thanks everyone...I wrote this one after hearing, "I like your personality, but I don't know what you look like..." Well, guess what, I USED TO think he was attractive too...love him much, he's still my friend, but he has more to learn about me than just what I look like...smiles and hugs to all.... |
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