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Nancee Junior Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 45Australia |
My heart has died Tis black with sorrow I am a creature of this earth Her moods, reflected in mine. This day, is sultry and chilled, A mirror of my inside. Tis love, you see That has done this. What was, is but a shadow. Many shadows dance inside. But this, shall cloud all others. Tight lips. Hands in fists, Hidden all behind. No mirror in these eyes Shall let you see the soul. Time shall give no entry. What you need Appears to unfold. Tears will fall. Wringing hands, twisted and clammy. Eyes will close. Hands be washed. Let us never again tarry. Enjoy the tales Of shining knights, And tales of endless love. But heed the fables And read each one, With an iron glove. Whose hand moves your knight? Are you a pawn upon this table? For which realm do you fight? The haughty or the able? |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
Great writing kid, this starts out as a sad poem and turns into a gothic like ending, great turn, I love this line of yours Tis love, you see That has done this. What was, is but a shadow. simply great writing, kid. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Nancee Junior Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 45Australia |
First, from the counsellor of Odysseus. Thankyou, Joel. |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
great poem i to like the history at foot. I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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pyro Junior Member
since 2000-06-18
Posts 12 |
hi there a wonderfull poem to say the least i really liked the lines... no mirror in these eyes will let you see the soul i feel this way all the time and i can almost see myself in your poem i really liked this and hope you post more poems soon so i can savor them and most of all enjoy them well done pyro |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
i would imagine, no wait, i hope, you have volumes of work just dying to be read. this is truly exceptional. as most poets say, i see myself here so much. time will give you no entry....... wow. i am there right now. i just refuse to hear the knocks. welcome to dark!!!!!!!!!! kynder The years teach much which the days never know. Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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taramw Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 738 |
Loved your poem! Look forward to reading more of your work  |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I like this one. Welcome to Passions! Check your email for something special.  |
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Nancee Junior Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 45Australia |
Thank you to one and all. We all crave the same We all need the same Why don't they all give the same? |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
"My heart has died tis black with sorrow. Tis love, you see that has done this. What was is but a shadow." Lovely expression of losing a love and experiencing the sorrow. Hope you are o.k., take care, James |
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SlyOne Junior Member
since 2000-06-24
Posts 16 |
Very good poem.....Thanks for sharing it with us..... |
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demoninlove Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211Dehradun |
Whose hand moves your knight? Are you a pawn upon this table? For which realm do you fight? The haughty or the able? Well written - explore the mystery of things Deepak |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Nancee, I guess I missed this one before. I love it. My favored line is "many shadows dance inside, but this shall cloud all others" So true, each hurt adds to the others, but certain ones just dwarf them all. Take care. Love your writing Sandra "If a man moves you to feel like a woman, the least you can do is let him." Merrit Malloy |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
OOPS!!! Sorry guess I missed this one too.  Anyways Welcome to Dark Passions!  And might I add........ GREAT Dark Poem you created here. Keep up the work cause I wanna read MORE! Peace Once there was a darkness Deep and endless night You gave me everything you had Ahhhhhh you gave me light |
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**STAR** Junior Member
since 2000-07-10
Posts 26San Diego, Ca. |
Very good I loved it. It is dark and insightful. Love the queations at the end. |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
Why was this not a book submission? WHY? It should have been, cuz it's wonderful! The last stanza esspecily. -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
lovely poem... well written... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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