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darkstar
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since 2000-08-09
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Port Richey, Fl, USA

0 posted 2000-08-12 10:44 AM


Red Lines


She looks at herself in the mirror
Running down her face, a single tear
She looks at what she holds in her hands
She knows that no one understands
The fear is there
So is a pain that she cannot bear
The urge again rushes through her
Why she does this she isn’t sure
She doesn’t want to do this
She puts it down and starts to sit
She can no  longer restrain
She picks it up again
She closes her eyes
The will inside her dies
She finally made her decision
She makes the first incision
She loses track of time
Stares at the thin red line
More and more appear
Her mind starts to get clear
Then finally she’s done
But she’s really just begun


© Copyright 2000 Danielle Zumstein - All Rights Reserved
Virgin Suïcide
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since 2000-08-11
Posts 319
Netherlands
1 posted 2000-08-12 10:52 AM


o my god....this is just great...it's almost like I'm the person standing there...I can identify myself so much with it...

check your mail, ok?

love, Virgin Suïcide...


And I shall not rest, til I get my loved ones back..........

CrEaTuRe
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since 2000-01-01
Posts 260
Kuala Lumpur,Malaysia
2 posted 2000-08-12 11:03 AM


well done with the flow of the words my dear  .... it does have a certain feeling that makes you wonder  
a-alibaster
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 392

3 posted 2000-08-12 11:37 AM


Like watching an old movie of myself a few years ago....you definetly know just how to hit home...
Well written and the imagery in unblievable.\
Until...


"There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul..."
a-alibaster

"I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less,
I am tears of pain, tears of Death.

Nikolette Sadness
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 337
port richey fl.
4 posted 2000-08-13 05:18 PM


danni...we could have a party and compare scars...my are long and jagged and yours are small and many...i think i have ocd...i always cut in fives

i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness.

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