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Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London

0 posted 2000-08-09 01:47 PM



Train of Thought

~~~


A lonely railway station ... with a pale moon shining down

An unkempt lowly trash collector ... holds the life work of a clown

~

A far off distant whistle ... a fast approaching train

The crackling flame of open fire ... in hearth he stares in pain

~

While twilights' Erie haze reflects ... the setting of the sun

The leaping flames suppress the need ... of basking in the fun

~

A headlights' gleam cascading ... a sadness through mournful wail

The slow approach perpetual ... in the cadence of wheel and rail

~

The old 600 rambled in ... as steam from ballast rose

and brought with it a gentle rain ... that soaked right through his clothes

~

Conductor shouting

' All Aboard '

as hearth receives his notes

He climbs aboard the Train of Thought ... just as distant thunder strokes

~~~


copyright 3/2000

Rex Allen McCoy


© Copyright 2000 Rex Allen McCoy - All Rights Reserved
fractal007
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1 posted 2000-08-09 02:14 PM


An interesting layout and some interesting imagery here.  Good work.
catalinamoon
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2 posted 2000-08-09 02:51 PM


Mmm, I like this a lot. You can hear the train coming..Incredible images. Train of thought..Great idea.
Catalinamoon

Marilyn
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3 posted 2000-08-09 04:54 PM


OK Rex....What am I missing? Why did he burn his notes on the hearth before boarding the train? Does this imply a lack of direction?(throwing away the details?) Or possiblity that he is burning up history to travel a new coarse in life about this train of thought?

Maybe I am reading much to much into the entire poem?...lol

Either way it is excellently done and I liked the presentation as well. Exceptional as always.  



When you are old and grey and full of sleep,
And nodding by the fire, take down this book,
And slowly read, and dream of the soft look
Your eyes had once, and of their shodows deep;

How many loved your moments of glad grace,
And loved your beauty with love false or true,
But one man loved the pilgrim soul in you,
And loved the sorrows of your changing face...

William Butler Yeats

Rex Allen McCoy
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Sippin a Timmy's in London
4 posted 2000-08-10 12:25 PM


fractal007 ... thankyou ... glad you enjoyed it

catalinamoon ... careful ... you can get on ... but you can't get off

Marilyn ... good to hear from you again ... I was beginning to think you might have been caught in that tornado ... had me worried
...
This poem marked the end to my joke poetry
very few were reading it anyway ... so I started writing serious poems just to prove to myself that I could write for real ... I think I've done ok at it ... I'm certainly enjoying the change and I find I take a little more pride in my finished product

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