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sgreybe
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since 2000-04-28
Posts 209
London, UK

0 posted 2000-08-07 05:14 AM


THE EFFECTS OF COMMON HURT:

Thoughts shared, hearts bared
You and I as one
Changed forever, still together
Closer we become

How I tried through tears I cried
To show a deeper me
It's harder now, strange somehow
For our friendship just to be

Though things have changed, our love remains
Deeper than before
For I could show and now you know
The life at my core

But it seems to me, retrospectively
We've lost our open strength
We can't relate, discuss, bebate
Our common hurts spent

  Does the real me scare you?

© Copyright 2000 Sylvia Greybe - All Rights Reserved
SpitFire
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since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396

1 posted 2000-08-07 09:17 AM


~S,...you have nailed this. Bam. Yep!!! Gosh, I feel like I can relate to what your words were saying to me. The question at the end is so very needed...Hhm...I have asked that question. I have needed the answer. S,...this is super. Got my brain ticking this Monday morning. Take it EZ. *Peace.

*BTW,...I noticed that you are a student in Stellenbosch, Western Cape, South Africa. I have recently started researching taking a semester of classes there. Well,...at one of the Universities that offer the Inter-study program. Mmm,...perhaps we could talk??? Thanks.  .

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082
Victoria Australia
2 posted 2000-08-07 09:48 AM


This is spot on, I particularly liked the question at the end.
Be well
Kethry.

"It is the image in the mind that links us to lost treasures; but it is the loss that shapes the image, gathers the flowers weaves the garland."- Cole

Deborah1
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since 2000-06-22
Posts 653
New Hampshire
3 posted 2000-08-07 11:40 AM


Sgreybe, I love the writings that make me think, ask questions, and most of all enjoy a read so well spoken. A teriffic job, I just loved it!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

catalinamoon
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since 2000-06-03
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The Shores of Alone
4 posted 2000-08-08 09:31 PM


Sylvia, loved this, what a good question, and so hard to know what it is that makes someone behave a certain way. Take care.
Cat....

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