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Dark Poetry #2

darkness in my belly

Gonzalo
Junior Member

since 2000-04-08

Posts 44
MI

0 posted 2000-08-03 06:50 PM

there's a creeping darkness growing in my belly
an insideous monster consuming all in its path
staining it
like the giant tumor that stretched my father's skin
swelled him up
first he just looked pregnant
then, grotesque
by trout season he was like a beached sea lion
taught
motionless
my skin feels tight
like some viable flesh remains, loosing
being covered
stained
unaccessible
the darkness is all i can reach alone,
yet two fair haired, fair skin waifs can
fight it, beat it
with a single "I love you, Daddy"
without them
i'm beached

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

1 posted 2000-08-03 10:40 PM

Such a dark sounding poem, and a sweet ending. Good stuff.
Catalinamoon

SpitFire
Member Elite

since 2000-04-19

Posts 2396

2 posted 2000-08-04 08:49 AM

~Oh my,...this is heaping with emotion. Full of images difficult to look at as they cause the heart to feel heavy. Those little ones,...are blessings. Be well G. *Peace.

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

3 posted 2000-08-04 08:59 AM

Scary poem, nice ending
Be well don't be beached.
Keth

"There are times in life a kindred spirit comes along. Hold onto those people. They are what makes this life worth living."- Anon

a-alibaster
Member

since 2000-01-08

Posts 392

4 posted 2000-08-05 10:52 AM

I can not explain why or how, but this touched me deeply. Lovely!

"There is an alter ego which
dwells in every soul..."
a-alibaster

"I am as I am, nothing more, nothing less,
I am tears of pain, tears of Death.

brian madden
Member Elite

since 2000-05-06

Posts 4374
ireland

5 posted 2000-08-05 11:01 AM

a very dark and interesting poem. REally really enjoyed reading this poem.

"I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone"
manic street preachers

Gonzalo
Junior Member

since 2000-04-08

Posts 44
MI

6 posted 2000-08-05 11:13 AM

thank you all for your thoughtful comments!

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