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With the answers i fall.....
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With the answers i fall..... |
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The Jackal Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A |
why stop counting the reasons and now there is no leaving because what is the point..? of staying and breathing? please,with regrets on the wall please, with the answers i fall soon i lost my vision.. then i seen you living as beautiful as hell could be believed you were here with me..and you held me loose..and i spilled my thoughts and through your eyes i see we are born to feel this free why do we whisper when we're all alone.. its all in my head dear..its all in my head when i clutch my escaping mind.. to my chest i still wish it was you..that i find but whats any other sane man to do? when everything he feels is dead or dying ..and he wishes he was too "you can have my isolation..you can have the hate that it brings you can have my absence of faith..you can have my everything" "so impressed with all you do..tried so hard to be like you..flew too high and burnt the wing..lost my faith in everything" "I am too connected to you to Slip away, to fade away. Days away I still feel you Touching me, changing me, And considerately killing me." The Jackal |
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bluebrdy65 Member
since 2000-05-16
Posts 276Gladys, |
Very sad yet very beautiful. I hope you feel better soon |
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Joel the wolf Senior Member
since 2000-04-06
Posts 1333Angels Camp |
The reasons for life are uncountable my friend, if I started now I'd never finish. this is a very heartfelt poem, very sad, and god I have been within it's grasp before. Joel. I howl a mournful song, that echos within my chambered heart, for all to read? nay for all to feel. |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Been there done that....not a happy feeling!! Sunshine does peer through the clouds again!! I must believe!! I did so enjoy your poem!! Bridgette  "Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved." -Unknown |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Been there done that....not a happy feeling!! Sunshine does peer through the clouds again!! I must believe!! I did so enjoy your poem!! Bridgette "Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved." -Unknown |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
I hope you feel better soon as we'll and please keep up your writtings because there great. I'm the lord, I'm the havoc, I'm the soul |
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Munda Member Elite
since 1999-10-08
Posts 3544The Hague, The Netherlands |
So sad, yet very well expressed. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
why stop counting the reasons and now there is no leaving because what is the point..? of staying and breathing? please,with regrets on the wall please, with the answers i fall soon i lost my vision.. then i seen you living as beautiful as hell could be believed you were here with me..and you held me loose..and i spilled my thoughts and through your eyes i see we are born to feel this free why do we whisper when we're all alone.. its all in my head dear..its all in my head ------------------------- jac, this poem is AMAZING and effects me deeply.. it is one of your best and definatly one of my favs of yours every single line ... oh man....PERFECT... the intensity of which you feel your emotions is very evident in this. your ache and desperation lifts of the page. exceptional writing, truly. I hope you find new strength and healing in your words... and in your talent...you have a gift my friend. your signature is perfect as well, take care poet jm It's amazing How you make your face just like a wall How you take your heart and turn it off How I turn my head and you lose it all ... And it's unnerving (How one move just puts me by myself) There you go just trusting someone else (Now I know I put us both through hell) ... I'm not sayin That there was nothing wrong (I just didn't think you'd ever get tired of me) And I'm not sayin (We ever had the right to hold on) (I just didn't wanna let you get away from me) ~MB20~ She says baby, It's 3AM ... I must be lonely, When she says baby, Well I can't help but be scared of it all sometimes, Says the rains gonna wash away I believe it. ~MB20~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
This is so rich and moving. And I know the feeling so well. Your work is incredible Sandra |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
AWESOME...blown away...and thank you, Janet Marie, for pointing this out to me...I probably would have overlooked it (it's so hard to read EVERYTHING...) great job, Jackal... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
just came back to add this to my "library list".. just realized how this new feature on the site works... so back to the top this one goes  later,jm |
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