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Brianna. . .
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Brianna. . . |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA 
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She stands on a hill overlooking the Bay From where she has come, no one can say She stands, watching the setting sun Wondering when her true love will come Twas on a day like this that he did depart It was on that same day, he took her heart Pledged to her that bright day his life And when he returned, she would be his wife Then, the day she most feared came Since then, her life has never been the same Word came that his ship was lost at sea She knew then that her soul would never be free So now, every day on that hill she stands Watching the ocean and the beach's shifting sands She waits to hear his voice above the waves For only by his voice alone will she be saved That final night, they say she heard his voice She leapt to the wall, she knew her choice Speaking softly, "Brianna my love, Brianna my light" "Come to me now my heart let your soul take flight" ------------------------------------------------------------- < !signature--> That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl [This message has been edited by Sven (edited 08-03-2000).] |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
You are amazing my friend. This is a really great poem. I have to give it several A+ A+ A+. Just awesome!!! Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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Gossamerwings Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 207 |
Touchingly beautiful,Sven!  Gossamerwings |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
ah beautiful......as if on that fateful night..that voice softly beckoned her to jump into the waters of her fate..and their destiny.....but looks as if she chose to stand and mourn atop that hill.....a very tender..bittersweet poem this is Sven. |
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Marina Member Elite
since 2000-02-10
Posts 2245Pickering, Ontario |
Love the poem! Have no clue who Briana is amongst your adoring female friends here at Passions. But Whoever she is, she is very lucky to have you write such a wonder about her. Marina It is a blessing to have wings for words, and passion in pen Marina Crossley |
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moshpit Member
since 1999-11-25
Posts 143cebu, philippines |
wow, u make it look so easy.. i wish i could write a poem as lovely and as rhythmic such as this.. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Thank you all. . . Xeonox, thank you my friend for your words and for the HIGH marks!! Gossamer, thank you. . . poutprincess, her decision was clear. . . as you have read. . thank you for your words. . . Marina, well, I hate to disappoint you, but Brianna is a creation of my own mind. . . she isn't real. . . except for right here. . . thank you. . . moshpit, thank you. . . and who says that you can't?? Give it a try. . . I think that you'll surprise yourself. . . ------------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Awesome poetry Sir Sven... regards, sudhir |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA |
Wonderful job, Sir, with your tale of angst and longing. It's beautifully crafted, reminds me of a story of a lighthouse my grandmother use to tell. Thank you for taking me back to gentler times--that's the mark of a very good writer! With a long held breath given dark freedom, the single flame in sorrow's window flickers out. ~EWD~ |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Oh God she says with tears in her eyes, Sven i gotta talk to you about this one,/.... I'm speechless... Wonderful beautiful work as always hon..  I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
And she willingly leapt from the wall, Into their beloved bay, She knew in her heart and soul, There simply wasn't any other way...... Had to come back again Sven, this is awesome for lack of a weaker word..... I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
I knew you of all people would remember! How could I have doubted?? Thanks Sven, you have made my week!! *hugs* I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Sven, Superb poetry here! Penned beautifully. Beth~ |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Thank you all again, Sudhir, thank you my friend. . . Evan, thank you. . . glad that I could bring back some memories for you. . . Isis, I knew that you would like this one. . . and I am glad that you did. . . Beth, thank you, glad that you liked. . . --------------------------------------------------- That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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