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Ghostly Walls |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration 
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With mixed emotions rushing by Preparing to depart. To leave behind these ghostly walls. To leave behind my heart. The hallways drip with emptiness, My footsteps echo loud 'Cross mem'ries of a simple life Falls a somber shroud. Another glance into the bedroom Where we once acted love Those walls saw so much happiness Though now, nothing's left of The laughter which once resounded Twixt whispered forevers, Gentle caresses in the night, And promises to n'er Let the other cross o'er the Earth Alone, to face life's trials. But promises made during times O' joy, are just denial Of the pain a broken heart brings Preparing to depart The empty halls of ghostly love To face another start. |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Chris I really liked this, I would have voted this one! Loved the way you take the reader along, it gives a clear image as well. Excellent!!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Loved this Christopher as I do all your stuff, the reader journeys with you through your pain.. Great stuff as always  I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Very nice Christopher, "the empty halls of ghostly love". Awesome. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Christopher,...I was a fly. On the wall. Of your thoughts. Felt this one. Ghostly walls and emptiness dripping. Ooh. Yep! Got me. Be well Sir C. *Peace. |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Well, I think this is very well done. The images work nicely with the whole theme. But, I still think you should be banned for posting this in the wrong forum (just kidding!). Elizabeth Why ME??? |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Thank you everyone! (cept' Liz, cause you're a meanie!)  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and I'll watch Elizabeth's back on this one, Chris, I'm still mad at you for having it moved from Voices!!! :P |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and I'll watch Elizabeth's back on this one, Chris, I'm still mad at you for having it moved from Voices!!! :P and see there! I'm so mad, I'm stuttering!!! [This message has been edited by serenity (edited 08-04-2000).] |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Whaddaya mean, I'm a meanie? I was nice and said this piece was good! And guess what? I even printed it, so there!  Elizabeth Why ME??? |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~Christopher, I really enjoyed this. Looks like Im going to be searching for all your work. I love all that I have read so far~ Beth |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
this was touching..full of heart and sorrow...much enjoyed! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
OKOKOK! Then it's my turn to ask your forgiveness Liz!  Poutprincess, thank you. Beth - Please do! But you'll have to look a ways back for most of it! I haven't been posting too much in the past couple of months! |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Don't know why I'm doing this, but I like this poem so I'm bringing it back up. Elizabeth You cling to your ways and leave mine to me. Suum cuique. ~Elizabeth |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
*bump* (just watchin' her back, Chris!) |
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firecrakker Member
since 2000-10-20
Posts 235Virginia |
I agree with Isis.. beautiful, as always..but, as I read it..I can't help but feel the walls are not only physical structures, but visceral ones as well. Empty, but resounding memories of love shared there. Sheila Life is a journey.. not a destination.. - unknown |
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Lady Lost Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 470 |
the irony that this was brought back up is killing me. what can I say... I know how you felt. p.s. where r u??? |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
does that mean you've forgiven me Elizabeth? S'en - traitor!!!  Sheila - walls can be both physical and metaphorical - in this case, both. You saw it the way it is.  Beth - Yeah - sad to say, many understand this feeling - probably why new walls are such a good thing. Thanks all for the ressurection! Chris |
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Dopey Dope
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Member Patricius
since 2000-08-30
Posts 11132San Juan, Puerto Rico |
I think this poem is great. I like the ryhme scheme and the way it flows. I hope to reach this level soon.......like.....like right NOW!  "I was born myself, raised myself, and will continue to be myself. The world will just have to adjust." I hate your socks. I'd like to burn them! |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Oh, excuse me while I grab a tissue... Plhhhhhuuueeee I feel better now. Actually, Chris, I liked this poem alot but Geeze, I guess living with Linda is starting to rub off on me a bit. While raw with emotion, I feel the flow could be tweaked to run a little smoother in just a couple of spots. Great title, btw, sets the perfect tone for the piece. Michael |
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Suzanne Arlene Member
since 2000-10-09
Posts 377Ontario, Canada |
great poem but should we build walls to hide old rooms? Just a thought. Made me think and first thing on a Saturday morning too |
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LM Senior Member
since 2000-08-03
Posts 585 |
Wheeeew... this is awesome! I just loved it: "The hallways drip with emptiness, My footsteps echo loud 'Cross mem'ries of a simple life Falls a somber shroud." You're good, man... Take Care! "Most girls want a man with the mean green Don't wanna dance if he can't be Everything that I dream up A man that understands real love" |
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Ron K. Fox Senior Member
since 2000-10-24
Posts 925 |
Ilike the walk you take us on room by room through a house of sadness. Just open the doorway to pain, come on in. Great write. Ron Tossing words like wishful coins into the deep well of an open heart. R. fox |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Thank you all for replying - this is in fact much older than even the date above indicates - it was written in response when a good friend wrote a poem for me about leaving my old house, one with many memories in the corners, and ghostly walls. In this case, the walls are again, both metaphorical and real ones. Metaphorical of course in the manner of walls around the heart - sometimes they're necessary for a person's continuing health - it's too dangerous to brood constantly over the pain - the erection of those walls can help block the pain until it's faded enough to e manageable. The walls of the home itself simply needed to be left behind. There was too much pain in every glance I took at a wall that once held pictures of a life that no longer existed. Once again, thank you all, it's been a treat to see again the difference between where I was "then" and where I am "now." Chris |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Well, I guess I forgive you. Elizabeth You cling to your ways and leave mine to me. Suum cuique. ~Elizabeth |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Duh, o.k. - no wonder I liked it so much - I read it before... but that's o.k., still was pretty good. Michael |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Hey Christopher, I still like this poem..LOL. Not too many rate two replies, see, you knew you were special. Anyway, why must I relate to every single even slightly sad poem I read? Is this a mental illness?? Help..... Never mind, I do think this is a phenomenal poem. Sandra |
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Elizabeth
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Member Ascendant
since 1999-06-07
Posts 6871Minnesota |
Have to put this one back in my library.  |
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skyshine
since 2002-02-07
Posts 3058Beneath the northern stars |
Something about this touched me....I know what it's like to have to let go and face a new start....this is wonderful.  ~sky You look inside my wild mind |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I enjoyed reading this and as you yourself said, seeing where you were then, and where you find yourself now. |
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