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Rusted Knight |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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Oh knight in tarnished armor, how will this come to pass? Your princess long awaits you, her love will always last. You could slay her dragons if you'd just unsheath your sword. She calls to you so desperately. How dare you act so bored? She worships you, as much as if you never let her down. Take off your helmet for a day. Your true love may be found. She right there waiting on the side until you're done your fight. Hurry now, you still have time to shield her through this night. Don't gaze afar too often, your princess has a heart. It's tender and it's breaking, Don't you see her fall apart? Are you a knight as you profess, or just another knave? Do you ride off without a care when only you can save? She gives you one last chance, though you don't deserve her love. Sir Knight, you'd better take it, lest she fly far as your dove. [This message has been edited by catalinamoon (edited 07-31-2000).] |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
This was a new and creative way to express a love awaiting for someone..and I really enjoyed the "tale" and how you created this!! Really good Cat!!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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Nikolette Sadness
since 2000-07-29
Posts 337port richey fl. |
my knight is as yours...he doesn't deserve my love...but i do wiat for him...for i am no dove.... sorry its kinda poemish...it just came out Nik i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness. |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
She worships you, as much as if you never let her down. Take off your helmet for a day. Your true love may be found. enjoyed... very different for you catalina ~~soft smiles M |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Cat,...you tell 'em. This is so creatively written. I loved it's story like theme. So many of these paragraphs just make me go *ouch*. *sigh*. You deserve only the best. Sending sunshine your way. Take care S. *Peace. |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Cat, go back to where I can vote for this one...MY little P.S as I forgot to tell you that oops, thanks Deb The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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Lynne Dale Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 114Melbourne Victoria |
Cat this is different for you, but I really like it. Be well Kethry. When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole. |
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demoninlove Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211Dehradun |
Now this was very very well written! And the piquant longing for the blind and stupid lover who does not see the beauty before his eyes presented very well.An eminently readable poem - with a steady effortless flow Good Show Deepak |
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L Tiuch Member
since 2000-02-04
Posts 151NY |
Well done, Cat. How many times love goes unrequited. Sadly written, and oh so true. Linda |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Cat, I agree, this is a departure from your usual style...but it is uniquely beautiful. I, too, loved the story-book theme. Do some more for us. Hardrock |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA |
Wow, loved this...made me ponder my own journies along midievel paths....May I? Wrapped in Heraldic Argent Grace walketh in the forest her tall lithe form with a silver halo and gentle aura draped in sheer silver silk. ~Silver Angel~ Our wandering knight doth mark progress along her graceful way by blushing silvered roses blooming in filigreed ivory amorettes from thorns which in her path would'st his armour hath pricked prior to thine's passing. This knight would'st thee approach with courtesy in all manner of chivalric virtue, ne’er thine name to disparage. To be worthy thine accolades this knave doth so aspireth as thine chain of fealty doth this gallant knight errant be so lurethed by, link by silvered link, to thine chalice which doth with kindred kindness overflow. Wouldest but that body be more noble than soul, thine indulgence he doth request and in humbled homage pay thee with this rusty relic of life's worn sentient tucked along soul's allurement nestled indepthly within his mind's castle keep. Draped in silvered lunar glow She walks as Grace, her carriage of noble virtue born of an ancient silvered soul with haloed head held high. EWDrake 5/2K With a long held breath given dark freedom, the single flame in sorrow's window flickers out. ~EWD~ |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Gosh Evan, your knight far outshines mine. I wish I knew where to find him.. Beautiful poem, and such authentic feel. Cat.... |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Excellent work, CatalinaMoon... liked it a lot! regards, sudhir |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I enjoyed reading these thoughts....This knight seems to lack appreciation...perhaps he is undeserving of yours...James |
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EWDrake Member
since 2000-07-30
Posts 183NC, USA |
No, Cat, mine is merely different in style. Rusted Knight is lovely and sincere. You have a way of making one feel as you intend. I greatly enjoy reading you. More... Thank you m'lady... Evan With a long held breath given dark freedom, the single flame in sorrow's window flickers out. ~EWD~ |
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Beth Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 468WA, Australia |
~A superb poem indeed~ |
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Deranger Member
since 2000-05-10
Posts 498Somewhere, between here and there |
Not all who wander are lost. J.R.R Token said that, and I use it in a similar context. Some people are cursed to wander endlessly and keep both sword and shield firmly in place. Oh crap, my replies are getting pointless again…must be waking up…. ---------------------- Spreading insanity, one post at a time |
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J. K. Mitchell Member
since 2002-01-12
Posts 311GA |
This is very good. It has this longing in it that I can't help but relate to. Good write! |
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