Dark Poetry #2 |
Gods at War |
lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Gods at War The clouds contract From ochre grey To blind opaque The dampness taps At first and then Deluge descends And up in heaven Prehistoric beasts Growl like cornered thieves Fire-branded for their deeds And silent light extends Its shrieking blaze Its jagged claw From high above Down to the floor Then shadows fade While darkness spreads Its negative white Swallowing all Within its sight Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Wow, that seems like the most perfect, poetic description of a thunder storm I have ever seen. |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Your so totally talented writing has covered me in a blanket of fright. Ooh. THIS is so Cool. Yes. Indeed. Take care U. *Peace. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
WOW a very atmospheric piece. really enjoyed this poem. very cool. "I am melancholy, flower cutting through stone" manic street preachers |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
Oh that battlefield in the skies..Reminds me too of the thunderstorm. This was really well done!! I enjoyed immensely!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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Jeremiah Johnson Senior Member
since 2000-06-08
Posts 1223Brooksville, Fl, U.S |
well it's no surprise everyone on here just keeps getting better and i really enjoyed it all. i most of like this one and how you describe it because i always like a good thunder storm. thanks for shareing I'm a dying romantic and when i can no longer write i can no longer live -Jeremiah Johnson- |
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allan Senior Member
since 2000-04-09
Posts 620On the road |
You really caught the atmosphere on this one Uta. Great work! |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Uta...Such a poetic description of...many things. I would share this with my child...beats telling them the angels are bowling and God is taking pictures. But then...I find other meanings here too. Excellent. Hardrock |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Bravo!! The reader can see a thunderstorm or a battle between the Gods in the heavens, wonderful imagery and just everything!! Great stuff hon I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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