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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA 
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To Catalinamoon...simply amazing that we came up with poems on the same subject so close together. GMTA (Great Minds Think Alike). Enjoy. The Friend I sat there in the barroom, My mind off somewhere far. She drifted in on a heat blast, And sat with me at the bar. "There’s a heat wave out there, Darlin’, Or don’t you watch TV?" Well, it’s not near as hot, as what I got, Going on inside of me. "Oh, feeling a little fiesty?", said she, And gave me a little wink. "Well, I’ll sit here, you buy the beer, And I’ll tell you what I think." "I think that you’re just lonely, And maybe you’ve felt pain. ‘Cause you ain’t sitting here drinkin’, Just to get out of the rain." "The only rain that’s fallen, Is probably the tears in your eyes. You’re tired of life, you hate the pain, And you can’t live with the lies." "So you hide away in this barroom, And try to drink your troubles away. But when you go home, the nightmares come, So you’re back here every day." "That isn’t the way to be livin’, That isn’t the way to have fun. You need to get out, breathe some air, Take a long, long walk in the sun." "This ain’t free advice I’m givin’, ‘Cause you know I’m a working girl too. But business is slow, I’ve got nowhere to go, So this is what I’m gonna do." "Let’s get out of this smoky ole barroom, You come back to my place with me. We’ll sit on the couch and talk about life, And I’ll fix us a cup of hot tea." "You don’t have to live with those nightmares, You don’t have to carry those scars. You don’t have to waste your life away, Sittin’ in smoky ole bars." "My love will overcome it, I’ll drive them right out of your head. And I can work my magic, Without taking you into my bed." "We both know that I’m a hooker, We both know what I do. What you don’t know, but I’ll gladly show, Is the secret to how to cure you." "That secret is my friendship, And my never tirin’ ear. So talk till all the demons go ‘way, I’ll be sittin’ right over here." We talked on to the morning, I cried and then she held me tight. When I left in the sun, looking forward to fun, I no longer feared the night. Amazing, the power of friendship, And some unlikely sources we find. Because of a kind hearted hooker, I’ve finally found my peace of mind. Marv Hardin 07/20/00 [This message has been edited by Hardrock (edited 07-26-2000).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Marvin, what a happy story. And of course GMTA, we already knew that. Also an interesting and well conceived poem, of course. And the power of friendship is strong indeed, even offered by someone you may never see again. Peace and Love always.. |
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MMoonchild Senior Member
since 2000-07-13
Posts 1715PA |
wow...there were so many phrases in here I thought about deeply..although it is me feeling this "The only rain that’s fallen, Is probably the tears in your eyes. You’re tired of life, you hate the pain, And you can’t live with the lies." but someone else doing this "So you hide away in this barroom, And try to drink your troubles away. But when you go home, the nightmares come, So you’re back here every day." and I can't make the two iron themselves out... sighing I did like the idea of friends..and I was told once to never turn my back on someone who may want to be a friend as you never know if that will be the "friend for life" ~~soft thanks for a wonderful story Maureen |
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Dark_kisses_Within Senior Member
since 2000-03-21
Posts 680Kansas |
WOW Marv!! That was a great poem/story.  The glory of friendhship The memories in sight Love is in the air No matter how we fight Look high into the sky And wish upon that star Your wishes may be granted Developing love from afar Peace DkW Once there was a darkness Deep and endless night You gave me everything you had Ahhhhhh you gave me light |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Wonderfully written/conceived poem/story, my friend. Well done, indeed. jwesley |
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L Tiuch Member
since 2000-02-04
Posts 151NY |
What a great, well written "story". It fascinates me as to the many guises friendship can take, and saddens me that so many "friends" remain strangers because we don't let them in. Nice work. Linda |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~Marvin,...this is simply amazing and holds such a true and meaningful and heart worthy message! I love it. Could picture the entire thing and fell right into it from the start. You rock the dock baby!!! Be well H. *Peace. |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
"Top Shelf" as they say, just an excellent piece of work!!! Friends come in many forms, the secret is letting them in, so good Hardrock, so good!!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
This poem is sooooo sweet! And it has such heart! I really enjoyed it! Wow! -Wren The thread of destiny Unknown by anyone Unseen by anyone Winds around your heart Moist with tears -Vampire Princess Miyu Theme |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Marvin, wouldn't it be nice if that happened? If you ever write a poem that is less than astounding I will eat a broom! Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Just reread this - still think it's great!! jwesley |
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Lynne Dale Member
since 2000-07-18
Posts 114Melbourne Victoria |
Marvin, This is top shelf poetry. Kinda reminded me of a hooker I once knew. Who talked more than she worked and she still made a fortune. Oh yes and tea was her drink. Great stuff. Kethry Kethry. When dark of night steals your soul. Think of me and be made whole. |
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DJLI Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 237TN, USA |
first this just shows you can't judge a book by its cover...and its nice to find poeple who'll listen to you ramble on about how life is treating you and help you feel better...great job...i really, really liked this one. EVEN ANGELS FALL. |
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Xeonox
since 2000-04-01
Posts 1764CA, USA |
This is the best poem I have ever read in my whole life. For reals. Great job. Ronil (What I say I live by and what I live by is what I create). |
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Nikolette Sadness
since 2000-07-29
Posts 337port richey fl. |
it seemed too long to read but i am glad i finished it...veyr heartfelt and intimate. Nikolette Sadness i was once in love and happy...but you can call me Sadness. |
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beowulf_26 Member
since 1999-06-29
Posts 183 |
I'm sitting here having read only two of your poems and I must say that I am completely in awe of your talent. You have a wonderful way with the language that conveys emotion, plot, and opinion while entertaining the reader. Simply masturful. |
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Virtual Abyss Member
since 2008-04-09
Posts 52East Coast - USA |
Marv, Your the best! It's almost time to try my first post. Thanks for the encouragement and the friendship! I'm looking forward to taking the plunge. Awesome poem again! Your bud, Dennis - AKA: Virtual Abyss |
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