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Rex
Member

since 2000-06-29

Posts 482
Houston, Texas

0 posted 2000-07-25 02:57 PM

Time's misted curtain
Has been lowered now,
To hang between
Your dreams and mine.
No seeking hands
May rend its strength,
Nor prayers prevail
Against the somber silence
Of its muting folds.
Here, my dreams,
And in the dimming distance,
Yours...divided now,
That all too long ago,
Were one.
Remains but the silver dust
Of remembrance,
Scarred by the drop
Of bitter tears.

thebeautybrat
Member

since 2000-03-30

Posts 114
Florida

1 posted 2000-07-25 03:01 PM

*scarred by the drop of bitter tears*
that was my favorite part of the whole thing!! i love the way you worded your poem!! nice work!

Deborah1
Senior Member

since 2000-06-22

Posts 653
New Hampshire

2 posted 2000-07-25 03:17 PM

Times misted curtain...beautiful verse...I love the whole thing, this was just a touching beautiful poem!!!

The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar

Hardrock
Senior Member

since 2000-02-14

Posts 948
New Hampshire, USA

3 posted 2000-07-25 09:03 PM

Rex...only someone who has experienced such pain can write so eloquently of it. Hardrock

tookabear
Junior Member

since 2000-07-24

Posts 28
Mansfield, TX USA

4 posted 2000-07-25 09:09 PM

Absolutely amazing... wow!

taramw
Senior Member

since 2000-06-08

Posts 738

5 posted 2000-07-25 09:15 PM

Fabulous poem Rex - yeah, I agree with thebeautybrat... my thoughts exactly!

lotharingia
Senior Member

since 2000-06-04

Posts 897
saarbruecken, Germany

6 posted 2000-07-26 05:11 AM

Fantastic, Rex!
"the silver dust
Of remembrance"
wow!

Lotharingia
"Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

7 posted 2000-07-26 12:01 PM

"Times misted curtain has been lowered now"
Gosh I love that line. You always write something beautiful and expressive of the pain, that we have been through.
Sandra

Wren
Member

since 2000-07-05

Posts 312

8 posted 2000-07-26 07:32 PM

The curtain image is skillfully used.... Wonderful job! I enjoyed it.
-Wren

The thread of destiny
Unknown by anyone
Unseen by anyone
Winds around your heart
Moist with tears
-Vampire Princess Miyu Theme

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