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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone 
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I keep on finding love, but it's like a tarnished chain. No sooner do I have it, than it cracks and breaks again. The silver turns to dirty gray, though I strive to keep it clean. I rub and polish every day, it still turns grayish green. So quickly does the tarnish grow before my very eyes. What makes this oxidation no matter how I try? I want my silver new, at least have a little glow. What good is tarnished silver? Why is it all I know? Perhaps the fault is blatant, silver ceaselesly grows old. The problem-Now I see it... I should have looked for gold. [This message has been edited by catalinamoon (edited 07-24-2000).] |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
Cat..a magnificent poem of self-awareness, realization, refocusing, redirection. The analogy was perfect..it never overshadowed the meaning of the poem. Love it. Hardrock |
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LarBear Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 138Kingston, New York |
Cat, What a great analogy. I like this one. As your professor should have said"great Work" Wanna gold dig with me? I saw one spelling mistake "The prolem-Now I see it...' Should it read problem? LarBear |
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LarBear Member
since 2000-06-23
Posts 138Kingston, New York |
Cat, Darnit, It did it too me. Two times one push?? yeah, go ahead and laugh... yadda yadda... (-:  )LarBear [This message has been edited by LarBear (edited 07-23-2000).] |
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Wren Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 312 |
Cat-  Go for the gold! Great poem, I like the comparison! -Wren |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
My friend please see You are like gold to me....... Lost without you I'd be I really like this one Cat, excellent comparison here, another awesome poem!!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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SpitFire Member Elite
since 2000-04-19
Posts 2396 |
~This is simply marvelous you!!! Now that you know what to be looking for,...go out there and find it! hehe. Great, I love it. Be well S. *Peace. |
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Rex Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 482Houston, Texas |
Catalina--Great one! Really enjoyed the analogy. May you one day find "the Golden meadow of happiness". Poetry is the spontaneous overflow of powerful feelings: it takes its origin from emotion recollected in tranquility. -William Wordsworth- |
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lotharingia Senior Member
since 2000-06-04
Posts 897saarbruecken, Germany |
Wow Cat! You are GOOD! I hope you find that gold too! Lotharingia "Dreams are life, reality, creation" Miguel de Unanumo |
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