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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia 
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Bittersweet agony Biting into me Naked flesh Angry lash I shall not beg for mercy Bind me, blind me, crucify me I'll suffer just to please Carry out my punishment With your sadistic ease And with each tortureous embrace I'll bow down to your command And hungrily eat the forbidden fruit that lay rotting in your hand Sweet misery envelopes me To awaken darkest lust I savour every painful treasure Of my masochistic curse Though hollow my eyes may seem As they echo every sin It's not my soul he finds in me Im only worshipped skin. |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Pout, the theme of image is a popular one in passions whether in poetic form or in Philosophy 101 and one I have also explored but I don't think I have ever seen it so painfully written. This is intense almost too intense, these words bled. All I can say I hope this is not your reality if so I wish you well. Take care, love and peace brian "A frog, it cannot comprehend the sea Nor me happiness" Paul Draper-Mansun |
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Hardrock Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 948New Hampshire, USA |
This is just too incredible for words. The imagery is fantastic...the pain so real. I'm sure this poem will speak to many here in DP. Excellent, PP. Hardrock |
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Nick_UK Junior Member
since 2000-07-21
Posts 10 |
Lovely! Probably the wrong word... But that's what I thought when I read it. Great stuff! |
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Professor Gloom Member Elite
since 2000-07-23
Posts 3082of Depression |
You did this well, I enjoyed it, I've visited these feeling myself; and can understand how the can dwell, lingering on the mind after not a mark on the skin you'll find, I've felt them again in your words. Gloom |
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demoninlove Member
since 2000-02-11
Posts 211Dehradun |
Skin deep - but not always. The right one will come along. Well written! |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
Thanks to all of you for taking the time to read and respond...i appreciate your comments and support very much!! |
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kynder Senior Member
since 2000-04-11
Posts 537Tallahassee, Florida |
last line is best of all. you said it girl. way to go!!!! kynder Sunshine can not bleach The snow, Nor time unmake what Poets know. Ralph Waldo Emerson |
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Deborah1 Senior Member
since 2000-06-22
Posts 653New Hampshire |
At first I started choosing lines..but the whole thing spoke volumes. This is just fabulous work!! The fragrance always stays in the hand that gives the rose...--Hada Bejar |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
I thank each and everyone of you for your kind comments....support like this gives me inspiration......Thank you very much! |
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JSage Member
since 2000-08-25
Posts 91Nashua, NH USA |
you were the first person to reply to my first posted poem.. so I thought I'd look at your writing and I am thoroughly impressed. Absolutely beautiful, yet dark and daring. I read your poem and I can smell sex, leather, and blood. amazing! |
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poutprincess Senior Member
since 2000-07-06
Posts 735Perth, Western Australia, Australia |
WOW..you brought this one back from virtual death! LOL thank you very much....and yes, you should be smelling those things! *smile* ~Dawn whatcha doing in this darkness baby when you know love will set you free? will you stay in the sea forever Drowning there for all eternity? ~Live |
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