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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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Would I could erase the past while saving parts that are best in me, all of that-- it would be done-- as sweetly as a whisper, "please..." If I could feel the trace of finger, echoes of your words in linger, if I could break this fever-- sweat-- still I'd not be done for yet. If I were sun, and you were dew, I could not, would not, diminish you. I'd reverse all laws of universe, if only just to breathe your breath. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
yes yes yes a taste of serenity at its sweetest... perfect reflection me twin *breathing 1n* ahhhhhhh me loves ya ... jm |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
serenity, love it love it....voting...  Parker |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
Serenity, this was divine. I hope this is a definite inclusion in the book. Loved it muchly. ~Heather |
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spiked Senior Member
since 2000-01-13
Posts 873Hammond, La USA |
"If I could" You did and you can. Really great poem Serenity Rich |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Serenity, Could emotions get better than this? I know not!!! ....... I'd reverse all laws of universe, if only just to breathe your breath. ....... Muchly enjoyed as I drown into the words here... regards, sudhir. |
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Kit McCallum
Administrator
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
The sentiments and the format are wonderful Serentity ... just beautiful! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
Very cool style!! I enjoyed this very much!!  Bridgette "Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Serenity~ This is lovely. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Serenity~Wow! This is GREAT!  -SEA *vote*Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
serenity glad i saw this one yuh yuh |
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linda munday Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 315Adelaide, Australia |
 If only just to breathe your breath... Absolutely fantastic... love your poems, this one especially. |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
S'en, Another awesome poem. You are able to take pain, longing, desperation and need, and turn it into something sexy and almost harmless. If that's not strength -- if that's not an awesome poem -- then I'm insane! Mike |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I would like to thank all, but especially Mike for the "sexy and almost harmless"--sounds like an insult but exactly the mood I was striving for...and to my muse---don't you believe that for a second! thank you much me friends... |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
Serenity, the only words I can use to describe this poem are "serenely beautiful". Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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CMGrimm Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685USA |
I loved it serenity... chris Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON. |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
serenity This To me ... is one of your best ... pure poetry ... |
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LoveBug
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Member Elite
since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is a beautiful poem! It definently belongs in our book! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Serenity, This is so wonderful, I very much enjoyed. Love, Cerenity [This message has been edited by Cerenity (edited 06-26-2000).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Poetry gets no more beautiful than this. I love it..... |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Lovely my dear! |
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WhtDove Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245Illinois |
Wow breathing a big sigh! What we wouldn't do for love |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Wow...thanks everybody, as this is my sentimental favorite...written for the sweetest one...so...mind if I spin again? lol |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Serenity, I would call this amazing And I would call you an outstanding poet And I would vote for this in a minute And I will Liz Ps Wouldn't you know, I signed off and forgot to vote, but it is now officially voted for [This message has been edited by Elizabeth Santos (edited 07-14-2000).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Elizabeth, I cannot begin to tell you how much your reply means to me. I am honored. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
ok one more vote won't make this any more outstanding, but I have to put my vote on this.....incredible! If I were sun, and you were dew, I could not, would not, diminish you. I'd reverse all laws of universe, if only just to breathe your breath. this makes me remember when I felt like this...sigh...great writing serentiy...wow [This message has been edited by Corazon (edited 07-18-2000).] |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Beautiful and elegant. Definite poetic experience all the way through. My vote is yours....Take care... |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
Just wonderful my friend. . . just wonderful. . . ------------------------------------------------------ That which gives light must endure burning --Victor Frankl |
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Heather Miller Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 409Bryan, Ohio USA |
AWSOME, BEAUTIFUL I'm new here but what I have read so far has REALLY touched me. There is so much emotion here. I also love how you all support eachothers work )LITL, Heather Anne Miller/Gambler With God all things are possible. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
My turn! (and you thought I'd missed it!)  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderful writing, Serenity! |
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Majestic Member
since 2000-01-11
Posts 264houston, tx. |
Very Sensual..lovely poem.. "To live is to love; To truly LOVE is to live!" ~kg~ |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
very romantic dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Mmm.. what a poem! *_^ yeah, I LOVE your ending to this.. gotta be sweet.. hehe.. "If I were sun, and you were dew, I could not, would not, diminish you. I'd reverse all laws of universe, if only just to breathe your breath" votevotevote!! Luv, Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu (Please e-mail me at yu_lan_wen_@hotmail.com instead of the e-ma |
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shadow of poetry Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 76midwest usa |
oh my gosh this is the most cool poem goodness i just love the way you write them out long form it really adds the the emotions sis told me i would dig your work she was right peace & poetry lil sis my sister is the poet I am but a shadow by the light of poetry I read then dream |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Doing the birthday bump from me library of rhyme divine Sen keepers. Its your day..the forums shall be your marquee  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
YES!!!!!!! Gleeeeeeeeee!!!!!!!!!!! |
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