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Kit McCallum
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0 posted 2000-06-19 06:23 PM

        The Phonecall

The call that comes in darkest sleep,
   Awakens with a fright;
For 2 am, the silence breaks
   The peaceful calm of night.

When only moments earlier,
   I dreamt of visions fair;
Of light and love and happiness;
   ... Till ringing filled the air.

It beckoned me from deepest sleep,
   And drew me from my daze;
I shook my head to clear my mind,
   Find focus through this haze.

"How long has this been ringing?"
  As I reach to find the light;
I steal a glance toward the clock,
  And now my heart takes flight!

'Tis many hours before the dawn,
  Yet all should be in bed;
My loved ones faces fill the night;
  ... My heart is filled with dread.

I struggle for composure as
  I reach to grab the phone;
My stomach churns, my heart contracts;
  "Are all my kids at home?"

I stumble as I grasp the handle,
  Stifle silent screams;
"Oh God ... please let this phonecall
  Be a part of just a dream!"

My heart is racing, mind's a whirl,
  Receiver's made of lead;
"Oh, how can this be happening!"
  "Who's on the other end?!"

Just seconds pass and yet I find
  It's been eternity;
I raise the phone to panicked ear;
  "Oh please ... don't be for me!!!"

/Kit McCallum

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1 posted 2000-06-19 06:40 PM

oh, I am glad you put this one in to be voted for...I remember reading it just the other takes you on a journey of terror that we all have known, and leaves you with your heart beating harder in your chest...great writing  
X Angel
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2 posted 2000-06-19 07:02 PM

Hehehe...I know this feeling much too well! Wunnerful poem!

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3 posted 2000-06-19 07:22 PM

dear kit,
     i've been in this situation far too many times... fortunately for me the reaction is more of a minor annoyance than terror due to the fact that i dont have anyone to look after *heh*... a wonderful poem though...

a sad tomato

you're such a beautiful freak... i wish there were more just like you...

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4 posted 2000-06-19 07:25 PM

Very cool Kit, I think we can all relate to this!!  It almost made me laugh but was serious all at the same time!!  I really like it!!  


"Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved." -Unknown

A Romantic Heart
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5 posted 2000-06-19 08:17 PM

Very emotional piece! you have my vote!
Janet Marie
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6 posted 2000-06-19 09:02 PM

been there done that...
you captured it perfectly
great work

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7 posted 2000-06-19 09:35 PM

Yes! My vote here!
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8 posted 2000-06-19 09:47 PM

Great work Kit
Poet deVine
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9 posted 2000-06-19 10:41 PM

My heart was beating wildly as I read this.. excellent poem!!!  
Sudhir Iyer
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10 posted 2000-06-20 02:15 AM

An excellent choice, Kit...

Very much liked this one..once, twice, many times...

regards, sudhir

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11 posted 2000-06-20 06:06 AM

For the memories it stirs ...
Thanks for including this.

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~

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12 posted 2000-06-20 06:30 AM

Such a tease this is....mercilessly leaves you hanging in the air, wondering how the phonecall will turn out to be...

well done, kit

Kit McCallum
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13 posted 2000-06-20 09:54 PM

***Thanks and MUCH appreciation to all above!  This was a recent post inspired by a very heart-wrenching situation from my friend, though it seems, many of us have all been touched with the same emotions many a time.  As always ... pray for a wrong number!

Much appreciation to all,

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14 posted 2000-06-20 10:56 PM

This is definitely one of your best, Kit!  


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15 posted 2000-06-21 02:55 AM

I can't say no to you, Kit. You again serve up a piping hot stew, only this one imbued with terror, concern and mothery ... beyond love into almost obsession. (or obsession) And no, I don't always talk this stilted -- I need to go to sleep.


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16 posted 2000-06-21 08:47 AM

Kit, I remember all too well reading this just a few days ago. I don't remember if I replied or not... I know I meant to but I was deeply moved by the terror so evident in your words that I might have needed time to think. If I didn't, forgive me... this is magnificent.


"We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka.

linda munday
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17 posted 2000-06-21 10:45 AM

When next my phone rings I shall think of this,,be it day or night.
Let me get over it (in a few days).

Elizabeth Santos
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18 posted 2000-06-21 11:39 AM

Excellent choice. Excellent poem

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19 posted 2000-06-21 12:00 PM

Your poem brings back memories. Excellent poem. Gimme more..  

Geir Jakobsen

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Ovid (BC 43-18 AD, Roman P

Kit McCallum
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20 posted 2000-06-21 09:58 PM

~Denise:  Thank you Denise ... makes me smile  
~Mike: Thank you!  And glad you can't say no to me Mike ...  
~Eric: No forgiveness required Eric, and thanks so much for the wonderful comment!
~Linda: Hope it's a wrong number next ring Linda! Thanks.
~Liz: Thank you so much Liz!
~Geir:  I'll try Geir, I'll try, and thanks!

Much appreciation to all,

ellie LeJeune
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21 posted 2000-06-22 02:08 AM

Kit; You got my heart pounding too! Great read. Ellie
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22 posted 2000-06-22 02:31 AM

Although you left us hanging, sigh, I definitely felt the pain of this one... Wow
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23 posted 2000-06-22 03:30 AM

Yep, this gets a vote.  

Yesterday is ash, tomorrow is smoke; only today does the fire burn.

"Everything is your own damn fault, if you are any good." E. Hemmingway

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24 posted 2000-06-22 07:03 AM

Great work Kit...


Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.

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25 posted 2000-06-23 06:35 PM

such a frightening feeling--and you have put it into words so well!!
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26 posted 2000-06-23 06:55 PM

Kit, I loved this poem when I read it before, and enjoyed it again today...what trepidation you have expressed, and so strikingly clear. Excellent.

~ Claire

Could a greater miracle take place than for us to look through each other's eyes for an instant?......Henry David Thoreau

Kit McCallum
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27 posted 2000-06-24 10:05 AM


Thank you sooooooo much.  Your wonderful replies are all truly appreciated!

With much gratitude,

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28 posted 2000-06-25 01:45 PM

Don't know how I missed this when it first was posted, but I read it now  
Very well written, a feeling I think any spouse/parent can relate to...

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29 posted 2000-06-26 07:57 PM

You are just excellent with your
writing! /Kit McCallum.

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30 posted 2000-07-03 01:22 PM

Hi Kit,

Wonderful and so true to have this happen to you, I know I have three teenagers and I always worrie wial they are out for the night.


Kit McCallum
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31 posted 2000-07-25 07:27 AM

~sea_of_okc:  Thanks so much Sea_of_okc!  Much appreciation for the comment!

~Insect:  Wow!  Loved that Insect ... thanks sooooo much!

~Cerenity:  It's all too often a fear ... thanks so much Cerenity!

Much appreciation to all,

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32 posted 2000-07-25 08:45 AM

Kit you've described artfully that horrible dread that everyone feels when the phone rings in the middle of the night.
I don't think there is anything that scares me worse.
Very well done Kit...held me like a vise.

Take care...ethome..

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33 posted 2000-07-25 09:34 AM

Yes very well written. Made me remember back to the call i got at 3:30 to say my grandpa joined the angels about 3 yrs ago.  ) I felt happy and sad all at the same time.

With God all things are possible.

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34 posted 2000-07-26 10:53 AM

I hate those phone calls in the night!
great poem  

"Life is like music; it must be composed by ear, feeling, and instinct, not by
rule."~ Samuel Butler ~

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35 posted 2000-07-26 03:02 PM

Kit, thought I voted on this, I was remis... So now i'm back to make x marks the spot....

Scary writing here, loved it, I think i'll get my phone unlisted.


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36 posted 2000-07-26 03:48 PM

I relived the experience, as many other readers did, of answering a call in the middle of the night, and the thoughts...
Thank you for the great writing.

Kit McCallum
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37 posted 2000-07-31 10:16 AM

~Ethome:  Glad I "gripped ya" Ethome! Thank you!

~Heather:  I'm so sorry for the loss of your grampa Heather ... thank you for your kind words, I do understand.

~Tess:  Me too Tess! and thanks!

~Parker:   Thanks Parker, much appreciated!

~Tiziano:  You're welcome Tiziano ... scary, they sure are, thanks so much for your response!

Much appreciation to all,

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38 posted 2000-07-31 04:32 PM

have felt this heart pounding fear myself..i do dislike those odd hour phn calls..they fill ones heart with such fear...

great writing, kit  


"Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you."
-Kahlil Gibran

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39 posted 2000-08-01 12:21 PM

My heart travels to my throat and fear squeezes the remaining breath out of me...then I come to the end of your poem.
How do you do it?
My praise to you on a great poem.

Life is to short to waste-so live it like it will last forever!

Kit McCallum
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40 posted 2000-08-02 07:42 AM

~DGVarner: Thank you so much DG ... I dread them myself, as I've known them too well!  

~Kimber: Wow ... what a lovely comment Kimber, thanks so much!  

Best wishes,

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