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Fred Hobbs
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329
Tallahassee, Florida, US

0 posted 2000-07-21 10:29 PM


The storm roared in as darkness fell
And cold winds shrieked like fiends from hell
For the warmth of her my soul I'd sell
But no one's buying, just as well
Dear God I am so lonely

Throughout the night the cabin creaked
Until the storm at midnight peaked
And banged the shutters 'til they leaked
Then icy fingers through them sneaked
And snow blew in my kitchen

The snow I gather in a pot
Then on the stove for water hot
To make some stew from game I'd caught
And dream of her whom I have not
To dream of sweet Diana

Although her name brings me remorse
Her mem’ry comes with wondrous force
My only joy, she was the source
But never was she mine of course
For Heaven took her early

She died some twenty years ago
Alone in darkness - drenched with snow
She’d called me to her home, but no
Said through that storm I would not go
To her the storm meant nothing

She lost her way that soulless night
All blinded by the swirling white
And wearied by the wint’ry bite
She stopped to rest - too weak to fight
An angel came to claim her

I know this now, I’ve known it long
She was my heaven-was my song
My life without her seems so wrong
Dear God, I’m still so lonely

© Copyright 2000 Fred Hobbs - All Rights Reserved
Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla
1 posted 2000-07-21 10:34 PM

Let me be the first to say Bravo. Wonderful job and you got my vote.

Poet deVine
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
2 posted 2000-07-21 11:15 PM

I don't mind 'seconding' Sy on this...same thing...great here!  
Marge Tindal
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores
3 posted 2000-07-22 05:09 PM

I love your tale of 'Diana' ...

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~

Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919
New York, USA
4 posted 2000-07-22 05:47 PM

Fred, This read beautifully, great tale, wonderful piece.  Bonnie
Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750
Glen Hope, PA USA
5 posted 2000-07-22 07:50 PM

*Applauding and clicking that submit button at the same time* Fred...I can only think of one word to describe this one FABULOUS!!!!!!!! Wow, this is as down right perfect as they can get. Excellent work. One other word....SUBMIT!!! Not just here, but several other places too. Wonderful poem  
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
6 posted 2000-07-22 09:34 PM

This is brilliant writing, Fred...
Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
7 posted 2000-07-23 12:35 PM

very sad..but great work

If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
8 posted 2000-07-23 05:18 AM

So sad but yet so open hearted and honest with yourself. The wonders of love and the deep trench it digs into the heart makes me realize that wonderful writing like this is a soothing ointment for the lonely. I got to give you my vote on this because it is so beautifully crafted with honesty.
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
9 posted 2000-07-23 09:36 AM

You KNOW that this is one of my all time favorites of your work... I'm SOOOOO glad you've submitted it.... VOTING..VOTING..VOTING..VOTING.....  

[This message has been edited by Nan (edited 07-23-2000).]

Fred Hobbs
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329
Tallahassee, Florida, US
10 posted 2000-07-23 11:27 AM

Sy, PdV, Marge, Bonnie, Hoot, Balladeer, Avanti, ethome, Nan

Thanks for the kind words and votes.  They always mean more coming from other poets and particularly from those whose work I respect so much.


Rex Allen McCoy
Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863
Sippin a Timmy's in London
11 posted 2000-07-23 02:37 PM

I doff my hat and bow to you sir
great to read ones like this
thankyou ... you have my vote

Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713
12 posted 2000-07-23 08:38 PM

Oh the depth of despair is a lonely place Fred and you have expressed tremendous lonliness and longing in this piece.

Love is the life of the soul...
It is the harmony of the universe

Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648

13 posted 2000-07-23 11:29 PM

This is awesome, Fred! I'm glad that I can vote for it!


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Member Laureate
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
14 posted 2000-07-24 12:15 PM

Just wonderful. . .


That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

Member Elite
since 1999-07-31
Posts 3023
United Kingdom
15 posted 2000-07-25 10:38 AM

Joining the chorus of accolades above..


"If you have built castles in the air, your work need not be lost;
that is where they should be.
Now put the foundations under them."

Not A Poet
Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA
16 posted 2000-07-25 11:58 AM

Fred, so glad I found this. It is truly exceptional.


Geoffrey Sonnen
since 2000-07-05
Posts 142
Reading, PA USA
17 posted 2000-07-25 02:16 PM

Totally moving and wonderously written Fred. If this is a true account, my Heart goes out to you my friend.

Peace to you,  Geoffrey

Heather Miller
since 2000-07-19
Posts 409
Bryan, Ohio USA
18 posted 2000-07-25 02:19 PM

oh my, it ripped my heart out  
That was so sad.
Very good writting....

With God all things are possible.

Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462

19 posted 2000-07-25 11:23 PM

excellent poem.  voted.
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268
Backwaters of Avalon
20 posted 2000-07-25 11:43 PM

Hey, Fred, this is very beautifully written, enjoyed it. you have my vote. man

- James
The beauty of nature is displayed,
not through itself,
but through the creatures
dwelling within its bosom.

Member Rara Avis
since 1999-06-15
Posts 7136
Mobile, AL
21 posted 2000-07-27 11:35 PM

This one had me all wrapped up.  
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