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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
The bus had left the corner Where she stood, Clothes soaked with mud She missed her only way out Now all that was left to do Was wait 'Till the next one came again She wiped away the dirt and grime And the tears that lingered in her eyes. Sobbing at passing strangers Made her feel self conscious As well as pitiful and pained. The reason she was here was just... To get away from it all A new place A new life Where nobody knew her name. Another body in the crowd Of passing city strangers Was really all she wanted to be. A single bag was at her side Containing all she needed to survive She opened the latch to retrieve some change That lingered somewhere inside. Getting up from the curb with newly dried, red eyes and face She walked to the saxophonist playing a block away, And placed her last two quarters carefully Into the old, beaten, leather case, And she knew looking at the man from which the passionate music flowed, There was an image of an unknown tomorrow, an image of such silent fear That matched her very own Like a broken, one way mirror. |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Joy~ This is GREAT!  -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Justbleu Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329Oregon, Originally From Alaska :) |
This was sad!! But i liked it!!! Bridgette "Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved." -Unknown |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Wow, what great images and word choice. I loved "pitiful and pained." And that she used her last bit of change on a street musician, trusting more in tomorrow than she lets on. Awesome! Mike |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
awesome indeed... i ditto everthing bsq jsust said those lines were perfect!! jm |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
*check* *check* *check* drat I can only check that lil box once... neat poem! I really liked this! ~Heather |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
oman tops in my book yuh |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
This is great! I sense that she'd tried to give up all her friends, everyone she knew, yet in the end she sought friendship with the unknown saxophonist? Go on, tell me please! am I right? loved it whatever the outcome "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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JOY 14 Senior Member
since 1999-09-22
Posts 1419Wisconsin USA |
This is one of my personal favs. of mine. lol. If it gets in the book or not, I'm just glad I got a chance to share it again with you all. Thanks for all your replies.  Joy |
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Isis Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-06
Posts 6296Sunny Queensland |
Joy a sad life she leads, I too think this is one of your best hon, it got my vote!! I'll tell you this...... No eternal reward will forgive us now for wasting the dawn..... ~Isis~ (Goddess - Sovereign of the Spirit) |
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kaile
since 2000-02-06
Posts 5146singapore |
Joy 14, i like the narrative tone and the smooth easy read...was particularly thrilled at the ending when she spent her last quarters on the street musician....such openness of heart she had for the uncertain future...What a heroine she is!!!  btw,thanx for replying to my "Awe(a concrete poem)...if i may ask, will you pls look at it again and tell me what did you interpret by my poem then?as u have said, different people see different things and i am curious at to the "message" you saw then.... Thank You |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
This is so wonderfully done...good on you Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Nice poem... I liked. |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Glad you are sharing it again, Joy, cos this is my first read of it! Stunning!!! Love and hugs, Lizzie  "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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BSC
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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
This is wonderful, glad I found it. Bonnie |
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