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Skyfyre Senior Member
since 1999-08-15
Posts 1906Sitting in Michael's Lap 
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Desert (posted here per Michael's suggestion and Philip's enthusiasm -- LOL  )I wander depths, Sands shifting beneath my insignificance. Shallows tower goldenly on every side, Stretching toward a rippled vision of sky. Sunbeams, stained turquoise, Extend cold ghost-fingers to soothe the flurries Swirling in protest about my trespassing. Now, in cobalt shadow, comes the menagerie: Flitting unearthly or gliding eerie, they move Around me, silent but for the watery whisper of passing. I am a stranger to unblinking eyes, Hardly a curiousity, and they are gone. So it must have been. But on this day, the sky peers, mocking, Reflecting the blue that was and is no more; The sun is never gentle now, but only varies in cruelty. What was sun-kissed shallow, now wind-swept height; What was golden in life stands golden in death. The sands are thirsty now, sullen, Cast in stony waterfalls and frozen waves, Sculpted still in memory of seas. Nothing stirs but what the winds wake, No sound but the rattling of death against death. So it is now, where I wander -- A graveyard of oceans, Rendered in dust and skeletons of trees. YOUR LIFE IS A TEST It is only a test ... If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions! |
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Ethan Halo Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793on the roof again |
magnificent imagery and a wonderful change up from all the emotional, heartache-y flub that flows here. this is a wonderful painting of a desert. i was thinking of the desert in an Indiana Jones movie. But if the menagerie is the Mafia, and the the "golden life" now standing in "golden death" are casinos, then this is also a fab poem about me hometown of Vegas. =) it's beautiful and voted for. "The bar is always open and the time is always right. If god's word goes unspoken, then the music plays all night." -Bradley Nowell |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
YAY Kess ... tick, vote, etc etc... wonderful poem ... lol philip |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and Im so glad you did post it... its perfect..amazing vivid imagery both visual and emotional jm There are places inside our souls - that have never been touched. There are places inside our hearts - that need to be loved this much. ~jm~ |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I will not comment on the beauty of this,any comments could not do it justice..I will just say I voted!!  |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Sharon said it. Kess, this blows me away girl. WOW.  K |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
Kess....whoa....sublime imagery. Alicat |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
This is gonna stay at the top till the ocean dries up ...I forgot to mention Kess that i just love the inversion in this poem... the way that the ocean floor becomes the desert sands and the shallows of the sea become the hills of the desert ... the way the ghost of the ocean and its denzins inhabit the first stanza and the death of today the second... i have lots more to say about this and i'm gonna keep saying it till you people read the poem and see how damn good it is ....LOL back soon p |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Kess, I didn't comment in CA because I never really understood other than to repeat what others had said. Still it's a beautifully written piece and most enjoyable. Thanks, Pete |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Kess, I didn't comment in CA because I never really understood other than to repeat what others had said. Still it's a beautifully written piece and most enjoyable. Thanks, Pete |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Kess, I didn't comment in CA because I never really understood other than to repeat what others had said. Still it's a beautifully written piece and most enjoyable. Thanks, Pete |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
LOL...way to go Pete ..way to go!!! i thought i was the enthusiastic one round hereabouts ... p |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
good poem ...well written If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
excellent poetry. voted. |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
i simply can't believe that this poem isn't permanently at the top .. after all surely it's gotta have massively wide appeal if both Michael and i think its brilliant .. no? i like it as much this week Kess as i did last ....lol P |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
this was very good poetry Kess, you should be proud of yourself that you can evoke such images with a meagre thing like a pen and paper! ~H |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
heather .. a lady of discernment at last .. thank goodness for you... and i havent forgotten about the men in weird white dresses btw p |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
I agree with Philip, this belongs at the top and in the book...Excellent writing Kess. You have my VOTE! |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
Wow, what an image of sand and sea.. I loved it.. Kess.. GrEaT PoEm - James The beauty of nature is displayed, not through itself, but through the creatures dwelling within its bosom. |
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Michael
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666California |
Brilliant might just be an understatement, Phillip... Indeed, one of the BEST I've read. Michael |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Excellent work, beautiful imagery, cadence perfect.......got my vote..... |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Kess~ Vivid ! 'What was sun-kissed shallow, now wind-swept height; What was golden in life stands golden in death.' Very vividly portrayed. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ [email protected] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
very well done kess you always move me yuh yuh "Amadeus Amadeus. Amadeus. Amadeus Amadeus. Amadeus. Am Am Amadeus. Come on and rock me Amadeus!"-Falco "don't even lissen to classical music!"-me |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Excellent indeed, Kess... regards, sudhir |
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Parker Member Elite
since 2000-01-06
Posts 3129ON |
Kess, your poetry will be remembered long after we've gone to dust. This one needs many reads for me to absorb the whole depth. Of course i'm kind of thick at most times.... Parker [This message has been edited by Haleyja (edited 07-21-2000).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
I can see why Michael suggested this...as always your imagery is supurb and you remain one of Passions masters of free verse. Not hard to vote for this one |
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Fred Hobbs Member
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329Tallahassee, Florida, US |
As always your writing is brilliant and your imagery flawless. I'm voting for this one as I hope I have for all of your postings. fh |
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