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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Chastity Undone Those sand and freckled shoulders embraced this pastel youth with flowing skirt and softly rising mounded breasts and twirling stars were drunk in spell of flagstone walk your hands restless and a song was easy when linen ironed the night and starched each kiss to pressed perfection zipping and undone we as bleached as the moon said through shaded eyes in abandon we lay on grass and covered our laughter in leaves through wind laced shadow embraced and quieted finally until the crickets purred and a chill blew across the valley that was innocence and my hair feathered in dark lines across your open palm and that was all there was to it. You took me back to the place where I started in moonlight that had pushed me and now folded me in the cobwebs of the corner of the hall as I climbed my girlhood stairs with my woman. And I slept with her for the first time naked under cotton sheets and I felt the wealth of something new and opening that I knew measured my becoming. In the morning there was a tremble in my hand as I touched my tangled tresses and stains of green tinged my feet as that dew-damp spell broke in mirrored fragments across the rose carpet where sun laced towards me in the provocative movement of time. I felt your brown eyes still moving across me as I looked to see what I had become and saw still the rounded belly of a girl waking blurred and imperfect with stretching circumference. But there was a difference and I felt its unsure steps that moved me forward when what I wanted was to turn and run run run back to the porch swing of safety where this dream was born and I would never be again… |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Makes my eyes water. And with those watering eyes I want to run run run and hide my little girl until she is 22. Really, it is beautiful Martie. A really really good read. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Ohh Martie, this is Excellent my dear the imagery is fantastic as always  zipping and undone we as bleached as the moon said through shaded eyes in abandon we lay on grass and covered our laughter in leaves through wind laced shadow embraced and quieted finally until the crickets purred gorgeous!! You took me back to the place where I started in moonlight that had pushed me and now folded me in the cobwebs of the corner of the hall as I climbed my girlhood stairs with my woman. And I slept with her for the first time naked under cotton sheets and I felt the wealth of something new and opening that I knew measured my becoming. Beautiful!! You are truly amazing sweetie Loved it all Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Martie~ Fantastic stroll through your thoughts. What thoughts you share. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Quite a story you've told here Martie, and I love many a line! Well told! |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Prometheus--All little girls grow up someday...thanks for the beautiful. Dark Angel--You are so sweet to me, thanks for the gorgeous and beautiul, I always appreciate your replies! Marge--Glad you liked the trip...and the sharing. Christopher--thanks so much for the read...Glad you liked it! |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
This is one of your best. Thank you for encouraging me to continue writing at this time. Liz |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
Steamy, steamy story Martie. Enjoyed it much. But like Jamie, think I better watch out for my granddaughter until she's a bunch older. Thanks, Pete [This message has been edited by Not A Poet (edited 07-11-2000).] |
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Rex Allen McCoy Member Elite
since 2000-01-30
Posts 2863Sippin a Timmy's in London |
Very beautifully written ... portrayed like a poetic page from your diary you can add my vote |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I loved this but it tells a sad and wistful tale.  |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
very true work... well written If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
One of my favorites, Martie! Denise |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Liz, I'm glad you like this one...you are the best. Not a Poet- Thanks for liking this/ Rex--thanks for the encouraging words...that's exactly like it is. PdV--Life is sometime sad and wistful, isn't it. Avanti--thanks for seeing the truth in this. Denise--I'm glad this is one of your favorites, for it's one of mine. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
glad to see this here martie, i loved this voting voting voting |
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Sudhir Iyer Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943Mumbai, India : now in Belgium |
Such a lovely poem, so well written... I am glad I could read it... thanks for sharing, Martie regards, sudhir |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
zipping and undone we as bleached as the moon said through shaded eyes in abandon we lay on grass and covered our laughter in leaves through wind laced shadow embraced and quieted finally until the crickets purred and a chill blew across the valley that was innocence and my hair feathered in dark lines across your open palm and that was all there was to it. You took me back to the place where I started in moonlight that had pushed me and now folded me in the cobwebs of the corner of the hall as I climbed my girlhood stairs with my woman. And I slept with her for the first time naked under cotton sheets and I felt the wealth of something new and opening that I knew measured my becoming. In the morning there was a tremble in my hand as I touched my tangled tresses and stains of green tinged my feet as that dew-damp spell broke in mirrored fragments across the rose carpet where sun laced towards me in the provocative movement of time. I felt your brown eyes still moving across me as I looked to see what I had become and saw still the rounded belly of a girl waking blurred and imperfect with stretching circumference. But there was a difference and I felt its unsure steps that moved me forward when what I wanted was to turn and run run run back to the porch swing of safety where this dream was born and I would never be again… ---------------- I was reading this the other day and got kicked off line...I had only gotten to the second verse... I have now read this 4 times... each time seeing something I didnt before each time being more awestruck by the story this tells of, the emotions of it,their depth and intensity, and by the amazing detail and imagery and by the grace of the unique way its written... which is your gift... which I'm grateful to get to experience latergator  jm I think I could need - this in my life If you're gone - baby you need to come home there's a little bit of something me In everything in you MB20 |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
WOW...the usual breath taking affair... wonderful Martie... K |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Corazon--thanks for the vote Sudhir--I'm glad that you read it too jm--you say the nicest things...thanks so much for that. Kamla--thanks for the wow, hon...now breathe! |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
You did not write this!!!! You have a team of Rhodes Scholars staying with you working in collaboration on these poems! But, just in case you did,....great poem, MArtie!! |
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BSC
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Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Wow, simply beautiful....Bonnie |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Balladeer--You're making me laugh and blush at the same time...do you have a little book of great replies, or what...Thank you! Bonnie--thank you for bringing this back up and for all your wonderful replies to my poetry...I appreciate it! |
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Mark Bohannan Member Rara Avis
since 2000-06-21
Posts 7269In the winds of Cherokee song |
Martie-youu know I loved this one....as always your imagery is superb but the stroll was even better. Count my vote in on this for sure. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Martie this is marvelous...you could have a book of your own as far as I'm concerned... Wonderful wonderful writing! click |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
very powerful! awesome the way you've put these words together...WOW... dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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shadow of poetry Member
since 2000-07-22
Posts 76midwest usa |
stunned voting unreal my sister is the poet I am but a shadow by the light of poetry I read then dream |
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