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Junior Member
since 2000-07-03
Posts 41
miami, fl, u.s

0 posted 2000-07-03 10:24 PM

what should i do when i miss something so bad i can't seem to let go of it?
when i miss it so bad that i'm scared to let it go because i can't live without missing it....

but i know it's bad.......
is not a good feeling
it has taken over my spirit,
influencing my whole being,
left me unable to think,
or even feel........

and all the while my life seems to be falling apart...... thing,
          then the others......

i'm helpless,
stuck in this place.....

but eventhough this bad feeling burns me from the inside out,
it keeps me holding up, awake,
with what a smal desire i have to live...

so now i just don't know what to do.......

i hope you guys like it...

thanks for reading,

© Copyright 2000 meyleen - All Rights Reserved
since 2000-05-10
Posts 123
1 posted 2000-07-04 09:10 AM

Welcome to the family!! I think this' a great first poem. Keep up the writing.

Dreams are the the gateways to making the impossible possible

Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168
Blue Heaven
2 posted 2000-07-04 04:21 PM

Nice poem, I enjoy shaped poetry.

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".

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since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462

3 posted 2000-07-04 07:03 PM

Nicely expressed.
Flower Power
Junior Member
since 2000-07-26
Posts 29
Ottawa, Ontario, Canada
4 posted 2000-07-26 03:45 PM

Yes, I did like it very much....I agree with the others....I like the shape of it.

Stephanie Lafleur

Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
5 posted 2000-07-26 04:16 PM

Great start.......very good poem...quite the shape...very interesting!
Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
6 posted 2000-07-27 07:03 AM

well written poem...
nice work

If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

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