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Sitting in Michael's Lap

0 posted 2000-07-02 05:31 PM

"Two parts of one," we always said, when any wondered
What magic held us close in love so many seasons;
No end to me, nor start to you – no sooner sundered
From you than I would be from breath – no better reasons
Than love and hoping fueled our fire, in ample measure:
But wealth of kings could not proffer
                                      a richer treasure.

My dearest friend, who held my secrets in his keeping,
Who knew the wounds that haunted still this tangled spirit;
Who whispered an "I love you" when he thought me sleeping
Each night for sixty years – and each, I smiled to hear it –
While others seemed to grow apart while growing older,
My favorite place to rest my cheek
                                     was still your shoulder.

We were the force unstoppable, the flame undying;
Though demons danced and angels fell, still we persisted:
And threats of failure never held us back from trying –
We met the challenge hand-in-hand, and double-fisted.
From disappointment and defeat emerging stronger,
For such would just postpone success
                                     a little longer.

The children came as children will, with wonder brimming --
Infusing every soul they touched with life and laughter –
We watched them as they grew, our fire never dimming,
And taught them to believe in 'happy ever after.'
We spun the twofold thread not even Fate could sever,
And wove it through the tapestry
                                    that spans forever.

But Time is an unyielding foe, a brooding cancer,
Who weights with age the youthful legs which once were agile;
And knows the way to steal the dancing from the dancer:
The twofold skein, reduced to one, is doubly fragile.
Where Fate had faltered, Death prevailed, with chilling fingers:
But though your hand is gone from mine,
                                    your vision lingers.

Now every breath awaits the shade who stole the living
From out my life; who claimed the essence of my dreaming –-
Pernicious Time has proved a victor unforgiving,
Who dulled the eyes which once with love for you were gleaming --
Yet though your flame has cooled to ash, and mine to embers,
You'll burn forever in my soul:
                                    the heart remembers.

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It is only a test ...

If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions!

[This message has been edited by Skyfyre (edited 07-02-2000).]

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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049
1 posted 2000-07-02 05:38 PM

Stunning!  This poem is deeply touching and tender....and beautifully done!
Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

2 posted 2000-07-02 05:41 PM

perfect my poetic princess...PERFECT!!!
thank you, there could not be a book
with out something from you  
this is amazingly beautiful in its emotions and vocabulary
take care jm

What the caterpillar calls the end ...
The world calls a butterfly
~Butterflies are meant to be free~

Dark Angel
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since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

3 posted 2000-07-02 07:36 PM

Oh Kess, this is simply gorgeous, a beautiful piece. voting!  

Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive,
my body goes on, my spirit has died,
and I though alive, feel dead inside.

"Rose Petal"

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since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505
Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA
4 posted 2000-07-02 08:12 PM

Brilliant language and execution, Kess. Vote here...
Marge Tindal
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Florida's Foreverly Shores
5 posted 2000-07-02 08:33 PM

Perfection !

'We spun the twofold thread not even Fate could sever,
And wove it through the tapestry
that spans forever'


~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~

Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
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Hurricane Alley
6 posted 2000-07-02 09:33 PM

Kess, I am so glad to read this..not just because it's magnificent..but because now I can vote for it!!  
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since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937
East Lansing, MI USA
7 posted 2000-07-03 12:05 PM

     this is truly one of your finest. . . I remember it well. . .



That which gives light must endure burning
--Victor Frankl

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738

8 posted 2000-07-03 12:57 PM

beautiful as always, Skyfyre, have been looking for you....and by the way, you think I could borrow your pen sometime?  (must be the pen...serenity exits mumbling...)
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
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Purgatorial Incarceration
9 posted 2000-07-03 01:11 AM

Oh, sigh, yawn, I guess this will do!

Kess, you know I love this! "the heart remembers..." indeed!

Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
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10 posted 2000-07-03 01:26 AM


truly - that wow says it...



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Posts 1906
Sitting in Michael's Lap
11 posted 2000-07-04 01:23 PM

Thank you all kindly and sincerely ... this piece means a lot to me, as it was written for my grandparents ...  

Hugs all,



It is only a test ...

If this were your Actual Life, you would have been given better instructions!

Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-13
Posts 7666
12 posted 2000-07-04 04:55 PM

   This poem nearly made me cry the first time I read it.  Reading it now and knowing the story behind it has done just that.  This poem sweeps you away to a love most people only dream of sharing - one that outlasts even Death and Time.  Beautifully rendered, my Sweet, and an excellent choice for submission me thinks.  


Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835
13 posted 2000-07-05 02:57 AM

*Doing my happy vote dance*

This just must be in the book..

Fred Hobbs
since 1999-06-08
Posts 329
Tallahassee, Florida, US
14 posted 2000-07-05 06:45 AM

Beautiful work Skyfyre.  I have voted for it but then. . . I vote for a BOOK of your poems.


Not A Poet
Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885
Oklahoma, USA
15 posted 2000-07-05 10:50 AM

Goodness Kess, Fred's right, w need a whole book of your poetry. Not only is this a beautiful poem but your chosen rhyme scheme looks to me like an insurmountable challenge. But as is your style, you handled it not only flawlessly but beautifully as well.      

Thanks for a great read,

Danny Holloway
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since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034
Tulsa, OK
16 posted 2000-07-05 01:59 PM

There are a handfull of poets in Passions whose writing is just amazing!  To me, you have always been one of those poets.  What book would be complete without your unique and wonderful writing?
My humble vote is an honor!

A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives.

X Angel
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since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521
17 posted 2000-07-06 12:18 PM

What an amazing poem, what an amazing love.
WOW! I am really at a loss for a proper response at the moment. This really touched my heart.


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since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919
New York, USA
18 posted 2000-07-15 12:49 PM

Skyfyre - What a magnificent piece of poetry.  This is simply outstanding. Bonnie
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