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Captive, I |
Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
I stand in a meadow The melody of her voice weaves Subtle webs around me I am held captive By her searchlight eyes Don't emancipate me Don't emancipate me Don't emancipate me I'm happy where I am Please don't free me Please don't free me Please don't free me Please don't free me Why? Don't wanna be lonely Don't wanna be free of Don't wanna be free of Don't wanna be free of Love So Mister Stove Pipe Hat Man I hopes you understand That I am held captive By her searchlight eyes And I'm happy where I am Alicat, the Persnikitty As I sit here dimly thinking Watching modem lights a-blinking Churning out poetic hash. Lord, in all Your piety, Help me keep my sanity: Please don't let the modem crash! --Alicat |
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Denise
Moderator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
This is beautiful, Ali! Just beautiful! Denise |
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Nicole Senior Member
since 1999-06-23
Posts 1835Florida |
Okay Ali, I just have to comment on this one. Yanno, of course I think this is a great poem because you're quite an amazing poet...I can really hear you reading this in one of your many varied wonderfully whimsical 'reading' voices. (Either that, or I've forgotten to take my pills...) Very cool, m'dear. Exceptional. N. |
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Poet deVine
Administrator
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I like this one sir! |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Love makes willing prisoners of us all. Nice poem.. jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Excellent poetry. Enjoyed. |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
ohhh I liked this....I'd like this to be read at Open Mic night Ali....at my shop..please come? *wink* ~Heather |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Very post-Beatnik of you. I enjoyed this. Mike |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Wow.....!! Awesome...kind of thing I want to go study...lol |
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CocoBaci Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 3043 |
Very sweet indeed Coco |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this should be set to music... love its melody and flow... enjoyed this read MUCH take care, jm What the caterpillar calls the end ... The world calls a butterfly ~LaoTzeTao~ ~Butterflies are meant to be free~ |
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ESP Member Elite
since 2000-01-25
Posts 2556Floating gently on a cloud.... |
Great stuff, Ali!! Love and hugs, Lizzie "Poetry is the true expression of my soul, it is my ultimate means of communication. It is my rainbow of delight." |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
voting for the captive like this one much, am a "eye captive" too |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
think I better get out of here...lol...every poem i have read this morning has a double post from me, cause i keep forgetting to vote....lol |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Ali, m'man, you do wonders with this twisted ol grey matter o' mine! |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Alicat~ A delightful read for sure. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
Alicat's the man! |
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Alicat Member Elite
since 1999-05-23
Posts 4094Coastal Texas |
No, I didn't vote for my own poem... I just wanted to thank everyone for taking the time to read and comment on the one poem I've written that I can actually remember. I swear, sometimes I think my mind is like Swiss Cheese...full of holes and ... well, cheesy...hmmm..... Alicat |
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Cerenity Member Elite
since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637Escondido-California |
Hi Alicat, I agree much with JM, this should be put to music, very much enjoyed thanks for sharing. Love, Cerenity "God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist. We have to be reminded that He exist!" (Writer Unknown) |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
ditto jamies comment: love certainly does make willing prisoners of us all....! and ditto janet marie: this would be a great song... you play music too ali? voting on this one dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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