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Tramp Poet
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since 2000-01-06
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Could Be Anywhere...

0 posted 2000-06-28 08:20 AM


the Rock

Twas walking about
the other day or so
just walking about.
When came across
a babbling brook
and rock beside.

A primal morn
innocence promised
a sit enjoyed.
Warmth of rock
large and sunlit
invited a lay.

Stretched full out
an invitation taken
became one with rock.
Suddenly transported
anchored to ancient
rock whispering.

Senses exploded
the I that was
absorbed, changed.
Rock thought, inside
becoming as one
symbiant realized.

Rock that is
Rock always shall
Rock of ages.
Seeing clearly
multitudes past
future eons.

Clearly seen
smile of child
laughing lovers.
Time no meaning
only being
so vast the vision.

Tomorrow’s
like pennies in jar
or sand on shore.
Yesterdays
like stars in sky
or voices calling.

At one with
and feeling all
the Rock giveth.
Once upon
self realized
sitting up, amazed.

Never to be same
Rock has changed
I am, that I am.
And yet now
there is another
the Rock is inside.


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                                bleeding...

                         "Tis ink coming  
          from his arm,
       Captain!"




[This message has been edited by bleeding (edited 06-29-2000).]

© Copyright 2000 Daniel James Burt - All Rights Reserved
Mike
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since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462

1 posted 2000-06-28 10:42 AM


Interesting read.  Nicely done.
Alle'cram
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since 2000-02-28
Posts 1816
Texas
2 posted 2000-06-28 11:33 AM


..and a beautiful vision it was. Great thoughts here, where the past, present and future become one with the rock. Great job.
Yu Lan
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since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462
New Zealand
3 posted 2000-06-30 09:01 PM


unusual.. I like this Daniel.. well done again. ^_^ yes.. an unusual, but fabulous feeling, very well described.. ^^



Lynne

"He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu



Jamie
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since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168
Blue Heaven
4 posted 2000-07-01 05:59 AM


The best Rock of all is the one that is.
Great Poem. jamie

Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil.
"Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely".



Tramp Poet
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since 2000-01-06
Posts 754
Could Be Anywhere...
5 posted 2000-07-15 06:16 AM


thanks each and all for the comments...
tried to convey the Rock relationship...

thanks again,
Daniel...aka:


bleeding...

"Tis ink coming
from his arm,
Captain!"


Cerenity
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since 2000-02-16
Posts 2637
Escondido-California
6 posted 2000-07-30 02:32 AM


Bleeding,

Enjoyed this so very much and can relate, I have a poem about rocks too, thanks for sharing.

Love, Cerenity

"God doesn't have to be reminded that we exist.
We have to be reminded that He exist!"

(Writer Unknown)

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7 posted 2000-07-30 08:34 AM


Daniel~
Within this poem I felt the power
of the rock and the serenity of man.

'Stretched full out
an invitation taken
became one with rock.
Suddenly transported
anchored to ancient
rock whispering.'

Very well expressed.
~*Marge*~




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Denise
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8 posted 2000-08-06 10:26 PM


This brought to mind the hymn 'Rock of ages, cleft for me.....' Very well written, Daniel.

Denise

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