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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209
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her fingers tired of composing the too many paper teardrops needed to cleanse the ache that had sprung from far deeper than she really cared to know and she felt over exposed and slightly chilled at the abandoning of so many emotions, so many tears and so she slipped back into her jacket stuck her hands deep into the pockets and as she walked away thought she should have known better her hands always hurt when they get cold |
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doreen peri Member Elite
since 1999-05-25
Posts 3812Virginia |
"and so she slipped back into her jacket" that line gave me chills a great piece of work here, corazon... and... i love it centered... makes the structure of it work so well with the lyric and cutting tone enjoyed much! glad you came and posted this. your work is so intriguing and special whoops, forgot to vote.. came back to vote... see? i'm not the only one who forgets that little box [This message has been edited by doreen peri (edited 06-27-2000).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
WOW, very nice indeed!  Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
very cool poem Corazon... love the presentaion and style... most of the emotions... yes...some days we could write till our fingers bleed. take care, jm baby dont you work so hard for this prize you've found, it will all be gone-when you turn around, cause nothing lasts forever anyway. Rick Roberts |
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Poet deVine
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since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
I like this one, very much.  |
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Marge Tindal 
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
Corazon~ Much enjoyment here. I like the formatting also. ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ noles1@totcon.com |
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Butterflies_dont_cry Member Elite
since 2000-03-06
Posts 3733Michigan |
I felt this one right to the core...wonderful work~ |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
I can't imagine any poem you would write that I would not vote for....no exception here.....a beautifully delicate poem |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thank you all, I always liked this one, but hesitated to submit, your comments are much appreciated |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Corazon, wow wonderfully written. delicate, and beautiful. "monuments put from pen to paper turns me into a gutless wonder" Manic street preachers |
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X Angel Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521Oregon |
exsquisite! ~Heather |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
So delightfully unique and touching! ~Vote registered~ |
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Romy Senior Member
since 2000-05-28
Posts 1170Plantation, Florida |
I love this, especially the last lines! Wonderful! |
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Brad Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705Jejudo, South Korea |
I think this would make a good addition. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks all, appreciate the comments much |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
You always express your emotions with such clarity! Very well done, as always! Denise |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
wonderfully written and presented. |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
thanks both of you...*soft smiles and sighs* |
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Not A Poet Member Elite
since 1999-11-03
Posts 3885Oklahoma, USA |
A really enjoyable, although sad, poem. I thought the presentation was excellent too. Thanks, Pete |
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