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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven 
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Alone Again Once again the sun has risen, yet I am comforted not by it's offer of abundant warmth. Frozen within this cloak of suffocating darkness I find myself once more.The ever so brief glimmer of hope, which was so cruelly and tantalizingly held before me drowned, like all those before. The cold winds of winter despair, descend upon the spring of my renewal, stripping away my happiness, leaving me raw and bleeding, broken, naked, humiliated and hopelessly destroyed. From within the tortured remains of my heart are squeezed the last drops of hope, their taste immediately familiar, as in the form of tears they pause upon my lips, before continuing their journey slowly down my face. Loving one so deeply has condemned me to a life in which none is returned, as the one who is loved loves me not in turn. The absolute abyss, love in a vacuum, trapped and isolated, unwanted and unfulfilled. Memories that torture come unbidden, cruel reminders of what once more might have been, and shall never be again. They leave me as they find me; alone and cold, shivering within the envelope of darkness that has become the dwelling of my destitution. Lonely and hurting, hungry and afraid. Alone. So alone. Always so lonely and alone. [This message has been edited by Prometheus (edited 06-27-2000).] |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
I meant to include a brief forward to this. Imagine if you will, getting back the your love of 15 years after 2 years apart, but only briefly, then "alone again" |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
 < !signature-->Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 06-27-2000).] |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Prometheus, WOW this is filled with despair, but oh so beautifully described. I LOVED IT! but ..... I cannot vote, for you have not flaged it. Please could you go to edit, so that I may vote. again this is excellent, I loved every line Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Thank You Angel...I have enjoyed your poetry very much,,among the best I have seen. By flagging do you mean putting it in the book?..Sorry but I have not noticed the option...I changed it however. Thanks Again....jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Jamie, you are most welcome! and I thank you. yes to put it in the book Yay, now I can vote voted!! looking forward to reading more. Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Jamie, again your words rise and ache off the page. again i say the depth to which you are able to express your emotions is both inspiring and touching. thank you for your words to me and the the things you have shared. take care kind soul jm baby dont you work so hard for this prize you've found, it will all be gone-when you turn around, cause nothing lasts forever anyway. Rick Roberts |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah, so sad. A belated WELCOME to Passions, my friend... Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Angel, Thanks again Janet, You are too kind... Sunshine, thanks for the bright and not at all belated welcome. jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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HelmutB Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 964Canada |
One thing for sure, very picturesque piece. < !signature--> The ability to describe life with words is similar to painting a picture; both can be powerful tools. [This message has been edited by HelmutB (edited 06-27-2000).] |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Excellent read Jamie.  |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
excellent poem... so well written, I liked it a lot but i have to admit i read your poem cause the name intrigued me I love greek mythology and as you goes you were the one who made man out of mud and got him fire with your torch from the sun... If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Helmut, PoetdeVine and Avanti, Thanks so much for the encouraging words. It is much appreciated. Jamie.. Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Di Junior Member
since 2000-06-29
Posts 19Ontario, Canada |
Wonderful! Your poem brought tears to my eyes. Alone is such a terrible place. Keep up the great work. Di [This message has been edited by Di (edited 06-29-2000).] |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This is the first I've read of your work. Your poem makes one think, that's for sure |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
WOW Jamie this is so beautifully sad - excellent poem - well done! I hope that one day soon the sun shines on your heart, and brings you the happiness you deserve J. |
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SEA 
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
Jamie~ I can't think of something profound to say so I'll just *vote* -SEALive,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Di, hootowl, moonshine , and sea; My sincere thanks for the compliments. It pleases me that my words can evoke such emotion in others. jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Siren's Song Junior Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 17 |
What's to say?? Stunning!! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
Ahh, a fellow writer who shares my love of commas! I might suggest that they be weeded out a bit, but stil this piece stands well! |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
Oh this is such a lonely and longing piece..I've felt like this before and it is not the greatest time in ones life..feeling for you Hugs Tracie~ Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe |
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Tanga Junior Member
since 2000-07-02
Posts 39BC Canada |
Your private memorial enshrines the love, hope, and past within your heart and soul for all time. Your body feels cold and empty as you long for what once was. But you have changed within and you have shed your old shell. The giving up of your old shell allows you to grow. The growth feels uncomfortable but it is during this time that you have discovered new parts of yourself. It is the building of new strength now afforded to you. Afraid yes of the unknown and untested. Standing as one half empty or is half full? Alone and lonely is the vacuum when the heart is locked but once open hope and love will blossom like a seed when kissed by the sun. A key is waiting to unlock the heart. One just has to turn the key and let the light shine in. Hugss <**> |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Thank you for the kindness. And it is comma heavy isn't it?? Even the critique is given with warmth,, thank you. jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
Very sad and very well written. Denise |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Yes I can imagine this scenario, rather I should say remember, and your poem is exactly what it feels like - "Alone" This is a feeling that President's experience at times, or people with terminal illnesses, or, those in a situation you describe. It makes no difference what goes on around you, you are still alone, and you capture the feeling so well. Bravo on this poem Liz |
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Honeybee Member Ascendant
since 1999-12-26
Posts 5372Ontario, CANADA |
I know the feeling of "alone" very well, even when I am surrounded by family and friends. What a way with words you have, this has my vote, a bittersweet read that reminded me almost of myself at times Take care, Melissa Honeybee The beauty of poetry gives me wings to fly |
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BSC
Moderator
Member Elite
since 2000-02-04
Posts 2919New York, USA |
Outstanding piece of work.....Beautifully sad and so well written. Bonnie |
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Geoffrey Sonnen Member
since 2000-07-05
Posts 142Reading, PA USA |
Hi Jamie. You really DO know how I feel, don't you ? I'm... I can't tell you...it's just like what Jeffrey Carter wrote to me in that he never would wish the misery that he felt when he lost his best friend would be something that anyone else would know. It makes me feel...well my Heart goes out to you. I hope that you find or have found someone that would always stick by you, no matter what. You hang in there too my friend. Peace to you Jamie, Geoff P.S.And Yes, before I forget, of course Jamie, it goes without saying, as always your work here is from the Heart and is outstanding. |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
Very nice job jamie philip |
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Corazon Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209 |
ok I know this has 28 votes and doesn't need mine to get into the book, but am voting anyway...great writing |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Thanks everyone. I am glad the kindness is not "metered" here....(sorry bad pun) |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
The ability to make sad into beautiful is an art expressed in this work Jamie. Very very well done! Gets my vote any day. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Sorry, when I say I am going to do something I should do it. I forgot to vote had to come back....Take care.......ethome |
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L Tiuch Member
since 2000-02-04
Posts 151NY |
Beautifully written. The sense of loss touched my soul. After being "alone" for the past 15 years, I truly know how you feel. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Ethone-- Thanks so much, twice--lol l Tiuch--Thank you,,, I would truly hate to think of 15 years....you must be very strong... Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Heather Miller Member
since 2000-07-19
Posts 409Bryan, Ohio USA |
Very well written, Very sad  Sad to say, I can relateLITL, Heather With God all things are possible. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
{~,^} Sunny ~~~Keep your face to the sunshine and you cannot see the shadow. Helen Keller ~~~ When you want to be loved, look within...KRJ |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
well written. enjoyed. |
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juliet_2u Senior Member
since 2000-07-23
Posts 1125North Carolina |
Jamie, sadness and beauty all wrapped into one. Truly a gift. Juls |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Heather; Sunshine; Mike; Juliet; Thank you for taking the time to read and reply. I really appreciate the efforts the poets here make for each other. Jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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