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Member Ascendant
since 1999-08-20
Posts 5705
Jejudo, South Korea

0 posted 2000-06-18 02:51 AM

I want to be adult about these things,
She said, her fingers wrapped around a cup
To warm her hands because she never drank
The coffee he was always paying for.

And what is that supposed to mean, he said.
His eyes remained on the dirty silver spoon
Hispanic hands were taking away; he heard
Glasses toasting some delight somewhere else.

It's not that you've been boring or bad to me,
She glanced across the dining room and smiled
At children running across the floor that led
Her back to where she didn't want to be.

At first, it was, you know, very nice.
She watched him snap his fingers angrily
At the high school boy who rushed to fill his cup
And then the waiter who picked up the check.

But I'm tired of watching the faces of others
When you are not looking at them.

© Copyright 2000 Brad - All Rights Reserved
Senior Member
since 2000-03-28
Posts 1369
1 posted 2000-06-18 02:57 AM

Whoa - lots said in this piece, Brad.
Lots of images - this is very good



Senior Member
since 2000-02-14
Posts 685
2 posted 2000-06-18 10:15 AM

great post brad..


Never be a carbon copy of anybody...make your own impressions. - ANON.

Poet deVine
Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612
Hurricane Alley
3 posted 2000-06-18 11:39 AM

Loved it the first time I read it, love it now...  
since 1999-06-10
Posts 297
4 posted 2000-06-18 12:32 PM

I like this, it's very deep, layered with meanings and ideas.  You can have my vote, but not b/c you're the moderator of the only forum I basically ever post in.  Moreso b/c I want you be accepted, and then go to a book signing dressed in a wookie suit as the high priest of Trevorism.  *grins*


I like too many things and get all confused and hung-up running from one falling star to another till i drop. This is the night, what it does to you. I had nothing to offer anybody except my own confusion.
—Jack Kerouac

Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191
Cape Cod Massachusetts USA
5 posted 2000-06-19 09:32 AM

Ah, yes - I recall this piece - It's a good'n, Brad - I like it..
Member Elite
since 1999-08-31
Posts 3329
Oregon, Originally From Alaska :)
6 posted 2000-06-19 12:20 PM

I was there with the two in this poem!!  So much said in this piece!!!  It is a good one!!


"Creation of woman from the rib of Man: She was not made from his head to top him; nor out of his feet to be trampled upon by him; but out of his side to be equal with him, under his arm to be protected, and near his heart to be loved." -Unknown

Janet Marie
Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554

7 posted 2000-06-19 12:26 PM

whew...felt the sting of this one..
very well written and so strong on the emotional imagery ...
with a subtle edge of bitterness ...
perfect choice

Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 1209

8 posted 2000-06-19 01:39 PM

I remember this from ca and you have polished it to perfection  
Novacaine For The Soul
since 2000-05-26
Posts 122
New Orleans
9 posted 2000-06-19 07:08 PM

dear brad,
     a small slice of life with sorrowful overtones... i found myself reading and re-reading this one... superb job...

a sad tomato

X Angel
Senior Member
since 1999-11-07
Posts 1521
10 posted 2000-06-19 07:47 PM, and seeing as we are not in CA...I won't tear this into shreds...naw actually I wouldn't anyways this was quite an insight into a breakup. Sheesh, I feel for them! (I've been there!)

Kit McCallum
Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada
11 posted 2000-06-19 07:51 PM

Wonderful imagery Brad ... you've set the seen very well in this!  Well done!

Best wishes,

Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration
12 posted 2000-06-20 06:22 AM

I remember this one Brad. The impact has not lessened.
Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870
TEXAS (it's all big)
13 posted 2000-06-20 11:50 PM

i like this one alot brad good job
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Member Rara Avis
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855

14 posted 2000-06-21 02:44 AM

Very accomplished writing. You made a trip to a coffeehouse and a breakup almost epic. Well, okay, epic is defined as happening in more than one country -- so not epic, but far-reaching. Loved it; should definitely be in the book.


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since 1999-06-05
Posts 596
Callington, Cornwall, England
15 posted 2000-06-21 08:40 AM

"I want to be adult about these things,
She said, her fingers wrapped around a cup
To warm her hands because she never drank
The coffee he was always paying for."

Womanspeak!!! it's beyond me too matey  


ps only kidding girlies, you know I love ya!

"We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka.

since 2000-04-16
Posts 414
Apex (think raleigh) NC
16 posted 2000-06-21 11:39 PM

wow brad, great peice  

luv Elyse

since 1999-06-10
Posts 444

17 posted 2000-07-04 02:58 PM


Yes, I admit your general rule. That every poet is a fool:
But I myself may serve to show it. That every fool is not a poet.

Marge Tindal
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores
18 posted 2000-07-05 02:16 AM

A most enjoyable read.
Certainly worthy of inclusion in the book.

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~

Member Elite
since 1999-09-18
Posts 2534
Whole Sort Of Genl Mish Mash
19 posted 2000-07-05 09:58 PM


I saw this when you first posted it and decided to go looking for it.  I am glad to see that it wasn't buried.  This poem is probably the favorite of the others you have written and I am glad to see you have decided to submit it.  Moving, solid work, Brad.


since 2000-05-11
Posts 291
grand rapid,MI, usa
20 posted 2000-07-12 10:19 PM


very interesting poem.  heavy on the imagery and deep on meaning.  different perspective of a break up of a relationship that I never thought of.  really good work, hope it gets in.

P. J. Kotrch
carpe diem
A soul once touched is a soul once blessed by love

Dark Angel
Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095

21 posted 2000-07-12 11:16 PM

Terrific images here Brad and so much said...
Wonderful writing,   you have my vote  

Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664
22 posted 2000-07-13 01:02 PM

simply great work...
well written poem

If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves
from which evolves the light...
Avanti Rao

Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359
23 posted 2000-07-13 02:11 PM

ok ...~grin~ now you've explained your methodology Mr Holmes you get my vote...       


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Ethan Halo
Senior Member
since 2000-04-28
Posts 793
on the roof again
24 posted 2000-07-13 02:30 PM

i just must say, that the first stanza sucked me in. it is a wonderful story. a serious conversation that neither one wants to be in and the distractions take them away. it's very good.
good work, good vibes.

"The bar is always open
and the time is always right.
If god's word goes unspoken,
then the music plays all night."

-Bradley Nowell

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant
since 2000-04-26
Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium
25 posted 2000-07-14 10:04 AM

Yeah! I remember this one and well (click)  


Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-22
Posts 9245
26 posted 2000-07-14 11:26 AM

It said more than a mouthful! I really liked this one  
Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296
Purgatorial Incarceration
27 posted 2000-08-03 11:20 AM

You know, I was just thinking... I believe this poem elicited one of my first forays into CA after you were made moderator!  
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