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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095
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Kissing the lips of sweet death I'm beyond all reasonable doubt Soon I will take my last breath Seriously this life I've worn out I look forward to ending this life Never needing again to pretend Gladly putting it all to an end. To taste death is thrilling me Hate never ever felt so fine Each moment simply divine Laughing aloud for all to hear I feel the madness within my head Pressure inside is extremely severe Shortly this tired brain will be dead Opening my eyes, I look at the sky Fearing not that I will soon die Secret Sanctuary here I come Welcome me with open arms Enchantment I will succumb Entwined within your charms Tis I who'll be your only one Death, as I kiss your sweet lips Encrust me with your rotted soil As I surrender to this total eclipse This has ended my hellish turmoil Heavenly kissing the lips of sweet death Angel of Darkness < !signature--> My grief lies onward and my joy behind (Shakespeare) [This message has been edited by Dark Angel (edited 06-26-2000).] |
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brian madden Member Elite
since 2000-05-06
Posts 4374ireland |
Secret Sanctuary here I come Welcome me with open arms Enchantment I will succumb Entwined within your charms Tis I who'll be your only one powerful images and a lot of pain with in your words. I wish you well and take care. excellently written has my vote. "An abyss that lasted creation A circus complete with all fools Foundations that lasted the ages Then ripped apart at their roots" joy division |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Wow..these are hard to do with lighthearted poems but with this dramatic theme you did a great job!  |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
this is has amazing poetry skills... this is a very difficult poem type to write and you have mastered it... not only the acrostic but the very impressive rhyme scheme-- which you have done perfectly... the vocabulary and flow are excellent... exceptional writing DA... take care, jm |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Brian thanks so very much for your lovely reply.  Thanks Sharon Janet Marie, Wow, thank you for the sweet things you have said. Glad you enjoyed it. My grief lies onward and my joy behind (Shakespeare) |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Dark Angel--heavy, intense, powerful writing...emotionally packed...well done! |
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Moonshine Member
since 1999-10-01
Posts 265Australia |
Well done M, This is excellent stuff! |
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Kit McCallum
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Member Laureate
since 2000-04-30
Posts 14774Ontario, Canada |
Powerfully dark emotions drawn from within here Dark Angel ... incredibly emotional! The style is magnificent, and yet, you've made it look so easy ... beautifully presented! Best wishes, /Kit |
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Mike Member Elite
since 1999-06-19
Posts 2462 |
Enjoyed your poem very much. Nicely written. |
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LoveBug
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since 2000-01-08
Posts 4697 |
This is very powerful, and wonderfully written. I hope it gets in our book! "We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars." -Oscar Wilde "The robbed that smiles steals something from the thief" -Shakespea |
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Colin Senior Member
since 1999-06-05
Posts 596Callington, Cornwall, England |
DA, I'm seriously impressed! such a long acrostic and it doesn't stutter once. Well done  Eric. "We are the music makers and we are the makers of dreams." - Willy Wonka. |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
A winner.....you made what had to be a difficult task roll smoothly along. jamie Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Martie, thanks sweetie Moonshine thanks so much hon Kit, yes looks easy but it took me a while to do thanks for your lovely replyMike glad you enjoyed,thank you Thanks lovebug for your kind reply Eric, Thank you ever so much Jamie, thank you my friend Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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tracie66 Member Elite
since 2000-01-18
Posts 4713Australia |
So powerful and deep...very intense indeed Great acrostic...well done Tracie~< !signature--> Love is the life of the soul... It is the harmony of the universe [This message has been edited by tracie66 (edited 06-29-2000).] |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
now i am confused .... should i just vote for all... lovely... I love your style... great work If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Thumbs up for style, content, creativity and pure writing talent. ~a vote from me~ |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Tracie, Thank you so very much for your lovely reply glad you liked! Avanti, Thank you for your kimd reply! Danny, So glad you enjoyed it Danny, Thank you so very much. Yes, I am here, but I am dead, not alive, my body goes on, my spirit has died, and I though alive, feel dead inside. "Rose Petal" |
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Poertree Senior Member
since 1999-11-05
Posts 1359UK |
and this was extremely clever ..i know hard these things are to write without sounding contrived well done P |
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