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bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

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0 posted 2000-06-17 10:12 PM

Even if this gets nowhere near the book, I just wanted to share it again, in hopes people would read it.

I really like this one.

Mike

-i am goodbye-
I am sunlight.
I am rain.
I am living.
I am pain.
I am mud-colored stones in a brook,
a long winding passage in a must-read book,
a turret of your castled rook,
a long lustful backward goodbye look.

I am nature.
I am love.
I am a woman.
I am a dove.
I am a man.
I am a horse.
I am an insect.
I am divorce.

I am sweetness.
I am your tongue.
I am your eyes.
I am all wrong.
I am all right.
I am the night.
I am a flashlight
With the batteries almost gone.

I am the long cords in your arms.
I am what you say when it can only end in harm,
Imploding collapse, a broken calm,
Middle finger all that's left of your palm,
Birds suddenly singing deathly psalms,
No longer just your only two's song.

I am love.
I am hate.
I am goodbye.
I am too late.
I am the rope from which you pretend to hang.
I am the words still sharp as fangs.
Puncture wounds and so-long swoons,
Nights alone watching the arc of the moon.

I am the diminished glow on your face.
I am the final night of her lingerie lace.
I am the first sun pouring through the blinds
When nothing but nothing is left on your mind.
I am your friends trying to help you through.
I am the loneliness that ferments and stews.
I am her, I am you.
Tell me what you want to do.

Janet Marie
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since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

1 posted 2000-06-17 10:48 PM

a long lustful backward goodbye look.

I am nature.
I am love.
I am a woman.
I am a dove.
I am a man.
I am a horse.
I am an insect.
I am divorce.

I am sweetness.
I am your tongue.
I am your eyes.
I am all wrong.
I am all right.
I am the night.
I am a flashlight
With the batteries almost gone.

I am the long cords in your arms.
I am what you say when it can only end in harm,
Imploding collapse, a broken calm,
Middle finger all that's left of your palm,
----------------
I am the diminished glow on your face.
I am the final night of her lingerie lace.
I am the first sun pouring through the blinds
When nothing but nothing is left on your mind.
I am your friends trying to help you through.
I am the loneliness that ferments and stews.
I am her, I am you.
Tell me what you want to do.
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butterfly slippers wants you to keep writing

and she is in heaven ...
2 forums to read your words in the same night
butterfly bliss *smile*
this is one of my favs of yours ...
its so MIKE...and that i like

later-I-am-gator
me-gator

netswan
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since 2000-03-28

Posts 1369
Washington

2 posted 2000-06-18 03:11 AM

This is great - glad I got to read it.
Truly worthy of a poetry book

~netswan

Kit McCallum

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since 2000-04-30

Posts 14774
Ontario, Canada

3 posted 2000-06-18 10:33 AM

I must have missed this before Mike, and I'm truly glad you posted it here. The format is wonderful and flows beautifully with your sentiments in this verse ... very well done!

Best wishes,
/Kit

SEA

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since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

4 posted 2000-06-18 10:36 AM

This is fantastic! I haven't read it before, I'm glad I got to this morning!

-SEA

Live,Love,Laugh :) ~SueB

X Angel
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since 1999-11-07

Posts 1521
Oregon

5 posted 2000-06-18 04:11 PM

oooh I liked the idea of this one. And some of your lines! WOW!

H

Corazon
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 1209

6 posted 2000-06-19 01:50 PM

well if one more vote helps here's mine

I love this

Colin
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since 1999-06-05

Posts 596
Callington, Cornwall, England

7 posted 2000-06-20 12:31 PM

I am liking this one

The flashlight with the batteries almost gone got a giggle.

Keep up the good work,
Eric

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

8 posted 2000-06-21 02:37 AM

Janet,
Always glad to make you smile. And "butterfly bliss" is cute.

netswan,
Thanks. That reply made me feel good aaaall over.

Kit,
Thanks for reading, and you enjoyed.

SEA,
Was it like waking from a long sleep? J/k. I'm glad you got a chance to read it, and thanks for your kind reply.

Xangel,
Merci.

Corazon,
Always glad to see you poke your head up and say hi every once in a while. Hi back.

Eric,
Okay, how old are you? You're not supposed to giggle, you weirdo!

Mike

serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

9 posted 2000-06-21 03:10 AM

Sigh.
Okay.
I admit it.
Avoided this one because it hurt...

and that is now exactly why I'm voting for it...sighs....ya just gotta get me, coming and going, doncha? loves ya...

deleeme
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since 1999-10-09

Posts 1766
NEW ENGLAND, USA

10 posted 2000-06-21 03:43 AM

Bsquirrel,
You beaufitully addresses a very sad and painful subject-yet did it in a very thought provoking way- I like it, you've got my vote! David

linda munday
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since 2000-06-17

Posts 315
Adelaide, Australia

11 posted 2000-06-21 03:49 AM

Heart here is all in a flutter...loved it Mike...encore

gothicmoth
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since 2000-06-05

Posts 89

12 posted 2000-06-21 04:33 PM

I...am...speechless. Wow.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

13 posted 2000-06-24 12:14 PM

Thank you, everyone. I'm glad you enjoyed, and appreciate my writing.

And s'en, sometimes the things that hurt us are the best things for us.

Notice I said sometimes.

Later, all.

Mike

doreen peri
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since 1999-05-25

Posts 3812
Virginia

14 posted 2000-06-24 01:10 AM

i'm crying

literally

this is awesome!

this is published in my memory... it's wonderful! in a word... this is poetry... thank you

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

15 posted 2000-06-24 06:01 PM

Doreen,
(hug) and thanks.

Mike

BSC

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Posts 2919
New York, USA

16 posted 2000-06-24 07:15 PM

What a terrific poem from beginning to end. Bonnie

insect
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since 2000-04-22

Posts 1014

17 posted 2000-06-24 08:26 PM

This is great!

I am voting!

Martie

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18 posted 2000-06-24 09:32 PM

Mike, can I surrender again? You are a wonderful writer!

bsquirrel

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19 posted 2000-06-25 09:29 PM

Thank you everyone. And Martie:

Mike

Balladeer

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20 posted 2000-06-25 09:39 PM

Jeez, I'm flying around here because I haven't been able to be around lately and I am REALLY glad I didn't miss this one. Excellent writing, Mike

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

21 posted 2000-06-26 12:28 PM

I can imagine a Shakespeare bust flying around, and it's very surreal.

Thanks, Bal(ladeer). I appreciate it.

Mike

WhtDove
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since 1999-07-22

Posts 9245
Illinois

22 posted 2000-06-26 09:21 AM

I didn't have the pleasure before, I'm glad I got it now! This was great writing

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

23 posted 2000-06-26 11:23 PM

Thank you, WhtDove.

Mike

Cerenity
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since 2000-02-16

Posts 2637
Escondido-California

24 posted 2000-07-03 11:56 AM

Hi Mike,

I am very glad I read this, and I hope it does get in to the book, thanks for posting it again.

Cerenity

bsquirrel

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since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

25 posted 2000-07-06 12:31 PM

Cerenity,
Thank you. I'm glad you enjoyed the poem, and also, thanks for saving it from obscurity!

Mike

bsquirrel

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26 posted 2000-07-13 11:57 PM

This old thing again?

M.

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