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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand 
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Forgive Me A soft jagged edge, Calmly screams at me. Ripping, Through my mind. I plead for it’s forgiveness, Hoping for redemption, All is lost; There is nothing to forgive. Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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jennie may* Member
since 2000-06-17
Posts 122 |
ooh-- I read this one a few times to fully grasp it. Good poem. "....Hoping for redemption/ all is lost.." I can relate to those lines. Very mysterious, yet to the point. Very expressive poem. |
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AVANTI Senior Member
since 2000-02-02
Posts 664INDIA/MAHARASHTRA/PUNE |
well written... short and very expressive If all was light...then I would have never learnt the dark...from which such truth evolves from which evolves the light... Avanti Rao |
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Christopher J Member
since 2000-06-21
Posts 94 |
Forgiveness is a great word.and a sad one..i wish i used it more often..this is a very well written poem..i like the short format, got the point stright across, no fumbling around..good to see! |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
hey YU, in this i see that "it" is the "edge" usually in my world, "it" is the "abyss" lol forgiven for nothing, eh? irony defined, perhaps? Wondering if anyone will see the humor? excellant, bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thank you jennie, AVANTI, Chris and Daniel.. I'm glad u guys like it. ^_^ Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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Jamie Member Elite
since 2000-06-26
Posts 3168Blue Heaven |
Forgiveness of oneself is indeed the most important thing. Great poem Tu ne cede malis, sed contra audentior ito. - Virgil. "Yield thou not to adversity, but press on the more bravely". |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
thanx Prometheus.. ^_^ (Daniel.. isn't excellent spelt with no a's?? ^^) Luv, Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu |
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Danny Holloway Member Elite
since 2000-01-15
Posts 2034Tulsa, OK |
Sometimes, so much can be said with so few words. Maybe, that is one of the nice things about poetry, expression and imagery at it's best. I hope to see pieces such as this in the book. It would enhance it's appeal i believe. ~~nice writing~~ dh A life isn't significant except for its impact on other lives. |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thank Yu Danny!!!! ^_^ Luv, Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu (Please e-mail me at yu_lan_wen_@hotmail.com instead of the e- |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Short but very effective and very well written..... |
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dgvarner Member Elite
since 2000-05-13
Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
i like this one  well written too dg "Half of what i say is meaningless; but i say it so that the other half may reach you." -Kahlil Gibran |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thanx ethome and dg! ^_^ Luv, Lynne "He who knows others is wise; he who knows himself is enlightened." Lao-tsu (Please e-mail me at yu_lan_wen_@hotmail.com instead of the e-ma |
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Jon Mewett Senior Member
since 2000-03-04
Posts 1304 |
(((((((((((Voted))))))))))) jon |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Thank you so much for your vote Jon! ^_^ Luv, Lynne |
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Tramp Poet Senior Member
since 2000-01-06
Posts 754Could Be Anywhere... |
hey Yu, excellant is the American Biker spelling... we don't use much High English 'round these here parts y'all! thanks for catching one of the words that i commonly misspell... sure you aren't an English schoolteacher? lol D bleeding... "Tis ink coming from his arm, Captain!" |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Hehe.. aah, don't worry Daniel.. just having u on.. *_^ ME? An English teacher?? lol.. *_^ hehe.. mah marks in English this year ain't all to wonderful, hehe.. don't think I'd be too good @ teaching it.. ^^ Thanx Daniel.. =P Luv, Lynne |
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jamesjiao Member
since 2000-04-12
Posts 268Backwaters of Avalon |
Lynne, hehe, you can be a good English teacher you know really? have confidence in yourself. You know how you always tell me your English is not up to standard? Now, I should say that you are wrong about this one.. I like this one very much. And i will vote. - James The beauty of nature is displayed, not through itself, but through the creatures dwelling within its bosom. |
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Yu Lan Senior Member
since 2000-04-13
Posts 1462New Zealand |
Hey thanx James.. ^_^ -Lynne |
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